What is this feeling?

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What is this feeling

 

You're a Girl from Finland (or any country you want but in this story we're in finland), and you're a big fan of BAP. Non of your friends know BAP since Kpop is not popular in Finalnd (except Vivi your best friend, who is in an another school) One day North Korea sent Bombs to South Korea and Korean people were sent all over the world to live safely. Since they're not in their countries, they decide to live normal life, so the youngest of the korean society has still to go to school. Accidentally, Zelo is the one, to come to your glass.

Enjoy reading :D 

(Btw everyone talk english in this story even if we are in finland)

Sorry if the Chapters are Short, But i'll make more faster.

 

If i write in this color you're talking

This is Vivi, This is Zelo

This is someone random

Foreword

 

If i write in this color you're talking

This is Vivi, This is Zelo

This is someone random

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ilovebapxo #1
Chapter 9: PLEASE UPDATE MOREE !! <3
kepumusse #2
You should consider a beta-reader for your fics. You have quite many beginner mispellings, such as crab (*grab), glass(*class), sit to my seat (*sit on my seat) Everyone are (*everyone is) up to dress up (*up to dressing up). You should also always write the pronoun "I" with capital I.

All these are just from the first chapter, which is barely half a page.

Grammatical errors and misspellings make stories hard to follow and the reader can't grasp the atmosphere etc. you're trying to convey because he/she gets distracted with them. You also come across as more professional, if you manage to write proper English. If you can't, then just stick to your native language.

I also didn't quite appreciate the way you used pictures in your story. It just makes me think that you were too lazy to actually describe the things in picture.
Ambrelamotte #3
Update please !!!^^
jello_ #4
Chapter 8: I really like this story^^
Update soon~
Xoxo424 #5
Chapter 2: This story......i keep rereading it. <3 hehe. Update soon :)
Xoxo424 #6
Chapter 1: please update soon
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