Title[4/5]: It fits the story well and is pretty intriguing.

Poster(s)[2/5]: It was, pretty okay. But there's like too much people in it and it's not that interesting, just full of characters..

Description & Foreword [5/10]: The description is  mediocre, though you can cut off the "I'll try to tell you how the characteristics of the characters throughout the fanfic, okay?" part. And for foreword, it was more of a note? so yeah. It's pretty much average, but I gave you a minus one for the foreword which was not a foreword get what i mean?)

Plot and Characters[16/30]: Okay, there's not that much fics with blind girls. But it's just usual, no surprise and stuffs, it's sort of unpredictable? And I don't really favor the ~~~.. Uhm, me, right? She's too much of  a brat for a girl who had been blind all her life. She should be more used to feel unwanted. Example: CHP 11, when the ukiss guys joked over her being unwanted, and also in soem other time when L.joe also didn't want her, she shouldn't run -.- She must've gotten those stuff a lot already. She may, though, feel sad and hurt, make up a lie as an excuse and run away, but running away just like that is highly unlikely.

Also, L.Joe just punched Baro who he saw kissing ~~~'s cheek. Either it's illogical, or the L.joe in this story is excessively violent and hot headed. He could've asked about it and didn't believe it or what, but it's not likely he will explode for a kiss ON THE CHEEK.

I know it's cliche, but you can always use the fall-on-top-of-each-other's-lips thingy.

In Chapter 12, Again, illogical to me. She gets too easily comfortable with Ukiss people. She even slept on Hoon's shoulder the first time they met~

In Chapter 13, I heard that blind people have superb sense of surrounding, voices and environment. She should've realised it's the same house she's been to. 

In Chapter 23, Jessica sprayed her to sleep. I wonder for what? >_< I don't get it~

And, why does she have to wait for Jessica to gift her the surgery? That couldn't be poor, Siwon's in the house, yo! You should make some stories, like they have debts no one knew about, etc.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Word Chose[17/25]: There are some minor mistakes, like:

I answered her shortly. Reaching for some glue. supposed to be: I answered her shortly, reaching for some glue.

But it wasn't that much and I still understand those, but proof-reading is really useful, so try that if you have time. And you write the korean part in a way to pronounce it, not the way it's generally written. I had a quite hard time understanding it, I don't know about other readers, so yeah.

AND, BIG MISTAKE. In Chapter 20, when Baro was beaten up by L.Joe, ~~~ actually SAW his eyes starting to close. How is that even possible?

*I think sir (if in like boss) is subbosed to be sajangnim instead of kwaejangnim. Where'd you get that from? :o

It's weird that L.joe didn't notice her being bling after all the time he spent with her, but it's a fic so it's okay.

Flow[8/10]: I don't really like how new characters kept popping out and suddenly, Hey! You have an amazing idol cousin! It's a bit weird.. But it's okay.

Also in Chapter 23, Jessica suddenly apologise ~~~ in a matter of one line. She should've regressed, like shifting in her seat feeling guilty of ~~~ blaming herself, etc.

You could've been more detailed with the story, like how ~~~ was casted into the show, etc.

Overall Enjoyment[11/15]: It was mediocre, a bit boring sometimes.. I won't really recommend it to my friends, the story is too plain. But not in any way bad.

Grade: 63%  a.k.a __[C]__ ( IDK)

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