4 WORLDS - 4 SOULMATES
BY DODO_KYUNGSOO1

❝ A STORY ABOUT A GIRL WHO DOESN'T HAVE ANY SOULMATES IN HER WORLD UNTIL THE GOD DECIDED TO SEND HER TO 4 DIFFERENT WORLD TO MEET HER SOULMATES. ❞
> TITLE [4/5] THE TITLE REALLY DESCRIBED OR TOLD THE STORY IN ONE PHRASE. BUT THERE'S SOMETHING LACKING. YES, IT'S EYE CATCHING TO READ '4 WORLDS' AND '4 SOULMATES' BUT IT DIDN'T GIVE ME A MYSTIQUE VIBE LIKE A FANTASY STORY WOULD BE, HONESTLY AND AS A MAJOR FAN OF FANTASY. I THINK IT IS BECAUSE YOU CONCLUDED THE STORY IN THE TITLE. > DESCRIPTION/FOREWORD [9/10] THE DESCRIPTION WAS VERY NICE! YOU TOTALLY TOLD THE PLOT THERE WHILE STILL GIVING THE READERS SOME CURIOSITY! GOOD JOB. THE GRAMMAR WAS FINE BUT IN MY OPINION, IT IS BETTER TO WRITE: 'MISA IS UNFORTUNATE IN LOVE' THAN 'MISA IS MISFORTUNATE IN LOVE'. THERE'S A SLIGHT DIFFERENCE IN THOSE TWO WORDS. TO PUT IT SIMPLY: MISFORTUNATE → BADLUCK, UNFORTUNATE → UNLUCKY. I ALSO NOTICED THAT YOU USED THE TERM 'UNFORTUNATE-IN-LOVE GIRL' IN CHAPTER ONE. I THINK IT IS ALSO GOOD THAT YOU MADE A CHARACTER CHART IN THE FOREWORD BECAUSE THERE ARE A LOT OF MAIN CHARACTERS. WHILE I WAS READING IT, I THOUGHT YOU WILL WRITE WHAT THE SOULMATES' WORLDS ARE, BUT IT'S ACTUALLY A GOOD THING BECAUSE THE IT MADE US, READERS, GUESS THE SOULMATES' WORLDS! AND YOU DIDN'T WRITE MUCH ABOUT THEM TOO. ABOUT MISA, IT IS SAID THAT SHE'S 'ALLERGIC TO RAMEN' BUT I DIDN'T READ ANYTHING ABOUT MISA AND RAMEN IN THE STORY.
> STORY PLOT [30/30] THE PLOT IS GREAT! I LOVE FANTASY STORIES AND YOUR STORY REALLY HAS SOME INTERESTING AND GOOD PLOT! I REALLY LIKE IT SINCE IT'S MY FIRST TIME ENCOUNTERING A PLOT LIKE THAT. IT'S VERY INTERESTING BECAUSE MISA HAS FOUR SOULMATES, OR MORE LIKE FIVE SINCE LUHAN HAS REALLY GOTTEN CLOSE TO HER. THE READERS CAN’T EASILY GUESS WHO SHE WILL END UP TO. IT'S COMPLETELY UNPREDICTABLE. THE STORY’S NOT FINISHED AND THE OTHER SOULMATES AREN’T REVEALED YET SO THE GUESSING/SHIPPING GAME GOES ON!!! THE ST