FEARLESS
by emilieee

❝ AFTER HER PARENTS’ UNEXPECTED FATALITY IN A CAR CRASH, HAN ISEUL LIVED HER LIFE IN WHAT IFS, PUTTING EXTRA CAUTION AND CARE INTO EVERY TURN. TO HER, LIFE WAS A FRAGILE THING, AND IT WAS TO BE TREATED AS SUCH. AFTER HIS PARENTS’ UNEXPECTED FATALITY IN A CAR CRASH, BYUN BAEKHYUN LIVED IN THE NOW — HE DIDN'T CARE ABOUT TOMORROW, NEVER TOOK RESPONSIBILITY FOR HIS PAST ACTIONS. IT WAS ONLY NOW THAT MATTERED TO HIM. HE ACTED ON IMPULSE; REGRET WASN'T IN HIS VOCABULARY. HE DIDN’T WANT IT TO BE. SO WHEN SEEING BAEKHYUN, DRUNK, RISK HIS LIFE ON A RIDICULOUS DARE OF SCALING A WALL OF A PRIVATE PROPERTY, ISEUL WONDERS IF SHE CAN DETEST SOMEONE MORE THAN THIS, THROWING THEIR LIFE ON A LINE FOR SOMETHING STUPID, TO TREAT LIFE LIKE IT WAS A JOKE. SHE HAD AN IMMEDIATE DEFINITION FOR HIM. IDIOT. AND SHE DIDN’T PLAN ON CHANGING THAT DEFINITION.  ...AT LEAST NOT WILLINGLY.. ❞
 
> TITLE [5/5] To start it off, I think that the title is really great. It's not that eye-catching, considering that the word 'Fearless' seemed to be used in a lot of stories for the title, I can't seem to think of more or other words that will fit as teh title, to fit the story.

It's really nice to know that you stress on the title a lot on the chapters and content of the story. It led for people to believe about the whole plot you were planning on, and that, my friend, is an extremely great achievement. So, yeah. Despite the title being kinda mainstream for the public, which makes people less interested to open it, in case they were types to read a fanfic based on reading off the title, no other words seemed to fit more to the story instead of the word 'fearless'. I really liked it, though. It gives off an idea of being fearless, but also it made people wonder. On what may lead her to become fearless? Or other questions like that. I really liked it, keep it up!  > DESCRIPTION/FOREWORD [8/10]

I really liked on how you explained both Baekhyun and Iseul's side of the story, on how they see and manage their lives. Also, I think it's very smart of you to write down those two coincidence, making the readers have an idea and a rough picture of matters like fate and destiny between the two, for their incidents. How you explained those are really interesting, and I liked it.

Though, I can't seem like I can say the same on the foreword section. I think pointing out the fact about the car crash once in the description is enough, and it wouldn't be necessary to elaborate and stress on it on the foreword section. Because the more you stress on the car crash, people would pretty much get the whole idea of it and eventually can predict what's going to be inside the story, the content. Which, will automatically make people too lazy to read because most likely, their thouhgts are probably going to be: 'eh, its about fate and car crash.'

so yeah, I recommend you to just mention about the car crash and leave the question hanging, without elaborating so much to keep up the curiosity the readers are having. > STORY PLOT [20/30] The plot is actually pretty interesting, on how different individuals share the same fate of their parents passing away due to a car crash. Yes, the foreword seemed pretty interesting and all, but I personally think that the 'fate' that they shared of their parents being dead by a car crash is just an excuse for them to get along? Uh, since you enhanced a lot on the fact that they are total opposites when dealing with life, but they're just going along just fine by the ninth chapter of the story. Personally, I would like it better if you could add more on the car crash and how they are somehow mixed up becuase of that. Since, it sometimes may be misleading on how you explained them having their parents in a car crash, but the content of the story is pretty much one of those highschool fanfics like any others. I hope you're taking my point right, because I really am curious about this likeness of incident that they have. I was expec