Words Of A Man With Two Hearts by Taesee & supershineeftw

Title (1/5)

The title is not cliché, which is wonderful, but it is not a very interesting title that makes readers want to click on your story. Also, the words, "of," "a," and "with" are not supposed to be capitalized because they are just prepositions in the title which are not important. This is the revised title: "Words of a Man with Two Hearts."

Appearance (3/5)

The poster is beautiful, but the poster does not seem to match with the mood of the story. Furthermore, it would be great to have a background, too, to make your story not look so plain.

Description/Foreword (9/15)

When I first saw your description, I thought, “That is too long–I don’t want to read it.” You also revealed too much of your plot in your summary. You have to keep your summaries short and sweet. It would also be best to move the character cast gif down to the foreword.

Your foreword is perfect. Simply move the character cast gif down to the foreword. The character cast gif is alright, but what would’ve been best is to explain each character–their personality/their role.

Plot (5/25)

Based on your description, I can’t seem to get the point of your plot/storyline. It is very ambiguous. After I read your description, I thought, “So.. What about it?” Rewrite your description–reveal just a little bit of background information and your main point of your plot. But, do not reveal too much or else your readers will want to leave after reading the description.

Characters (7/15)

The characters are a bit cliché and dull, but I can see that there are some qualities about them that make each character distinct.

Writing (Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation) (8/20)

Note: Fix your run-on sentences! 

Foreword

Before: I let the biggest jerk in school: Kim Myungsoo, play with my feelings, and my heart, and then he’s going to walk away from it all and act