Luck Is On My Side & So Is He by eunjin990116

Title (0/5)

It's long and wordy, and the title is dull. You want to have a title that's short, but captivating.

Appearance (2/5)

The poster doesn't quite give off a cute and comedic feeling. It has the characters and the title, though, so I'll give you two points for that.

Description/Foreword (5/15)

Your description has many grammar errors. In addition, it gives off a cliché plot. Just from reading your description, I can tell that it's going to be the girl who got her heart broken many times in the past and finally finds her Mr. Right in the end.

For your foreword, it's best not to add a character description. It shows that you are a weak writer and would rather tell the readers than show them. In writing, it's always best to show the audience instead of telling them. Plus, sometimes character descriptions kind of clashes with your story. For an example, in your foreword it says that "you" want to avoid attention. However, when Woohyun asked to sit with "you" for lunch, "you" suddenly allows him to join despite the fact that she's getting attention from the popular group's fans.

Plot (5/25)

The plot is very cliché. It's one of those typical stories where there's an unlucky girl and in the end, she finds her Mr. Right, who happens to be one of the kingkas. You can almost find this type of story anywhere on AFF. However, I like how you used the pen pal idea in the beginning. I just think the pen pal idea ended too quickly.

Characters (4/15)

The characters, too, are pretty cliché. "You" happen to be extremely beautiful but choose to wear nerdy glasses that make you look unattractive. The main character also happens to be what most "you" characters on AFF are: someone who has a perfect personality, is rich, and hides her true beauty.

The other main character, Woohyun, is also cliché. He's your typical kingka who falls for you in the beginning and wants to get to know you better. Many of the fanfics on AFF have the main male character with this kind of personality, which shows that this character is quite common and predictable.

Writing (Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation) (6/20)

You had a lot of grammar errors in your story. Plus, you want to keep your writing