The House Behind The Magnolias by Moony_Kat

Title (4/5)

It's a bit long for a title, but I like how it doesn't spoil what your story is going to be about. It makes me wonder, "What about the house behind the magnolias?" Oh, and one thing. The title should be, "The House Behind the Magnolias" instead of "The House Behind The Magonlias."

Appearance (4/5)

I like your appearance. It appeals to my eyes and brings out the mood of your story. It gives off a historic-like theme, especially the house in the poster. 

Description/Foreword (12/15)

I love your description! It doesn't quite give me a summary of your story, but it tells me enough information that I can accept. There are some grammar errors in your description, though, so you might want to check over that.

To your foreword. At first, I thought that it was only a character chart and your author's notes. You proved me that I was wrong. Your foreword captivates my attention, and the character chart is a bonus to your foreword. However, I always discourage the use of character charts because I believe that it's best for the readers to know who the characters are and what their roles are. One thing that I noticed while reading the story and seeing the character chart. In my opinion, I think that Thunder should replace Luhan in the character chart since he was the second main lead who is fighting for Eun Rim's heart. Luhan doesn't seem to have an important role until the end of the story. That, of course, is just my opinion. This opinion doesn't affect your grade, by the way.

Plot (19/25)

In ways, the plot is cliché. There is a demon and a woman who love each other, even when the woman knows that she shouldn't. There's war all over the world, which is common in historical fanfics. In addition, the main female lead leaves because she is conflicted with her own feelings. However, I enjoyed watching the plot develop until the end. Luhan turning mad almost made me fall off my chair, and when Eun Rim left, I was screaming, "No! Why? Don't leave!"

Here's one part of the plot that I thought was a bit unnecessary. The part where Eun Rim visits her sister and finds the reason why her father left her wasn't as important as the rest of the plot. The plot would've been fine without knowing Eun Rim having a twin sister who is in Heaven or her father's reasons for his accident. 

Characters (10/15)

It's bit difficult for me to examine the characters. Some chapters began without me knowing who was speaking and who was doing a certain action unt