The Car That Took My Love Away by soojungie1303

Title (2/5)

It’s great that your title is unique, but it is just a bit dry and it doesn’t really catch my eye. The title is way too long, too.

Appearance (5/5)

The poster is just beautiful (since my awesome friend and co-author made this)! But, it ask for a background next time. It adds beauty to the appearance of the story!

I do not mean to be biased in any way about this section of the grade. I seriously think the poster is well done and fits perfectly in the mood of the story.

Description/Foreword (2/15)

Your description does not keep my attention. Even though it sounds sweet and loving, it does not matter to the readers. Try to hook the readers with, maybe, a more suspenseful quote or phrase from your story. 

Add something to your foreword! Give the characters’ profiles on personality or hobbies. Give a short excerpt from your story. Keep your author’s note at the end.

Plot (6/25)

The poem at the beginning is slightly awkward. But, I like how the poem adds foreshadowing. The rising action before the went too quickly and the falling action after the was too big of a drop. Soojung suddenly didn’t want Myungsoo, but after the car crash, she wants him back? The resolution seems a bit fuzzy. The problem was that Soojung broke up with Myungsoo and the solution is to have a car crash?