Reviewer: KillerGal

Title [5/5]

Definitely relevant and I’ve yet to see a fic with the same title yet.

Foreword [5/5]

It’s short and simple, but very accurate. I used to have eating disorders, and the control part is just very accurate.

Grammar & Spelling [16/20]

Original: wasn’t any strong feelings

Revised: weren’t any strong feelings

Original: Minseok felt like the worlds most powerful person

Revised: Minseok felt like the world’s most powerful person

Original: their confines deep in Minseoks mind and

Revised: their confines deep in Minseok’s mind and

Original: Worthless and gross and disgusting.

Revised: Worthless, gross and disgusting.

Actually both are fine, but the second seems to flow slightly better, IMO.

Original:  Tea was fewer calories

Revised:  Tea has lesser calories/Tea meant lesser calories.

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