Who Wants To Marry a Millionaire?

Author: Syaadan

Reviewer: kpopulzzangforever

Date: 5/4/2014

 

FIRST IMPRESSION

How effective was the title?

The title was somewhat effective, I'm not saying its bad. This is just my opinion, the reason I say this is because to me the title didn't really sum the story all up.

Poster and BG layout? (Only if you have one. If you don't have one, you will not be assessed on it)

You didn't have a poster or a BG which made it kinda plain. But I did like how you added a picture in the beginining of each chapter c:

Foreword and description: Did it draw me into wanting to read more?

The foreword was good I really liked it. It made the story feel like a tvshow which is a good thing.Also the foreword reminded me of The Bachelorette without the guys getting sent home, I really liked it c: The description was also good  it sumed the story up. All in all the foreword and description were good c:

STORY

How was the plot laid out?

The plot was laid out well. After each date you added interview which was a great idea. But the way you transitioned to the next date made it seem rushed. I'm not saying that it was bad it was unique c: All in all the plot was laid out well.

How was the pacing of the story? Was it draggy or was it rushed through?

The pacing of the story was not draggy or rushed through. It was just right even though like I said before after the dates you did go right to the next date, not saying this is a bad thing its a really good thing. All in all the pacing of the story was just right for the theme/plot of the story. It made the story feel like a tv show which is a good thing c:

Was the characterization consistent?

The characterization was consistent. You stayed with the character and their personalities.

Was the story flow fluent? Was it choppy or was it smooth?

The story flow was fluent. it was smooth. When I read it I could understand very well c:

How did you organize your events? Was it in order or was it all over the place?

You organized the events in chrongological order which is a good thing. It wasn't all over the place it was in order.

How effective was the ending of each chapter? Did it leave me wanting to read more?

The end of each chapter was really effective it really left me wanting to read more c:

 

MECHANICS

Grammar and Spelling?

The spelling was good I didn't notice any mispelled words. For the grammar I also didn't see any grammar mistakes. I know that english isn't your first language so you really out did yourself c: great job

Use of Transition Words? (It helps with the flow from paragraph to paragraph so it doesn't seem choppy)

Really good use in transition words.

 

How did I like it overall? Further Comments?

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