Author: nfhafiza

Reviewer: kpopulzzangforever

Date: 5/15/2014

 

FIRST IMPRESSION

How effective was the title?

The title "Ludos" were really effective. It really summarized the whole story.

Poster and BG layout? 

The poster was well done c: I really liked how the characters blended in with the stars in the sky.And the bg was really simply but I really liked it the poster and bg went well which I really liked c:

Foreword and description:

Did it draw me into wanting to read more?The foreword was really cool I really liked how you add reviews. The description really drew me in, I also really liked how you add the type of love it was really cool c:

STORY

How was the plot laid out?

The plot was laid out well. You used present tensed which was very new to me, I really liked how you made it present tensed instead of past tensed even though Im not saying past tensed is bad Im just saying it's just rare to read a present tensed story.

How was the pacing of the story? Was it draggy or was it rushed through?

The pacing of the story was draggy nor rushed, is was just right.

Was the characterization consistent?

The characterzation was amazing. You stayed with their personalities and the character. 

Was the story flow fluent? Was it choppy or was it smooth?

The story flow was fluent . It wasn't choppy it was smooth.

How did you organize your events? Was it in order or was it all over the place?

You organized your events by povs which is a good thing. I really liked how you have point of views.

How effective was the ending of each chapter? Did it leave me wanting to read more?

The ending of each chapter really really made me wanting to read more I couldn't stop myself from not reading it. Amazing~

 

MECHANICS

Grammar and Spelling?

Your grammar was great and so was your spelling. When I read it I really didn't notice a spelling mistake or grammar mistake at all.

Use of Transition Words? (It helps with the flow from paragraph to paragraph so it doesn't seem choppy)

Good use in transition word c:

 

How did I like it overall? Further Comments?

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