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Author: illumina_dain

Reviewer: kpopulzzangforever

Date: 5/20/2014

 

FIRST IMPRESSION

How effective was the title?

The title was quite effective, it really sumed up the story c:

Poster and BG layout? (Only if you have one. If you don't have one, you will not be assessed on it)

The poster is awesomely well made, it fits the story very well. All I saw of the bg was the color black, I'm not saying it a bad thing its a good thing, the bg goes with the story and  poster very well.

Foreword and description: Did it draw me into wanting to read more?

The Foreword was um kind of confusing to me at first but then I got  it when I read the story c: The description was very well written. The description made the story looks so how you say professional , great job c: The description drew me into the story 100 percent.

 

STORY

How was the plot laid out? The plot was

How was the pacing of the story? Was it draggy or was it rushed through?

The pacing of the story was not rushed through nor draggy. It was in right in the middle balanced out.

Was the characterization consistent?

The characterization was well consistent. You stayed with your character and their personalities c:

Was the story flow fluent? Was it choppy or was it smooth? 

The story flow was smooth , it was easy for me to understand.

How did you organize your events? Was it in order or was it all over the place?

You organized your events very well, it wasn't all over the place ,

How effective was the ending of each chapter? Did it leave me wanting to read more?

The end of each honestly really made me want to read more update soon~

 

MECHANICS

Grammar and Spelling?

The grammar was great c: I didn't see any grammar mistakes. The spelling was also great i saw not spelling errors .

Use of Transition Words? (It helps with the flow from paragraph to paragraph so it doesn't seem choppy)

Great use in transition words .

 

How did I like it overall? Further Comments?

Annyeong~ Kpopulzzang here I know you wanted me review your story my strictest and  I did . I gave it my honest opinion and what I thought of it, I really thought it was a great story well written,revised and I love the plot. I honestly loved your story , you got a new subbie right here  Great job c:  Update soon~ <3 If you are not satisfied with this review I do offer re-dos c:

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