mygracelesshope [Lunacy]
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Title: LUNACY
Author: mygracelesshope
Story Link: LUNACY
Score: 94.5/100
Title: [10/10;]
Impressive title. 'Nuff said.
Foreword/Description: [7/10;]
The description is nice, impressive and an attention seeker. It gives the vibes, the creepy vibes, the dark vibes, everything your story is about. It would be good if you change it a little though, just a little change won't hurt, no?
ORIGINAL:
Are you willing to pay the price of knowledge?
Even if it will cost you
Your memories?
Your sanity?
Your life?
N paid the price
To know the gruesome details
About the past, present and future
Addicted to the moon
His lunacy, his choice
Are you willing to pay the price?
REVISED:
Are you willing to pay the price of knowledge?
Even if it will cost you
Your memories?
Your sanity?
Your life?
N paid the price
To know the gruesome details
About the past, present and future
Addicted to the moon
His lunacy, his choice
Are you willing to pay the price?
The italicized words gives more vibes. Creepy vibes. and for emphasis.
Plot: [19.5/20;]
I love it. There are only few stories here that has the same plot as yours or maybe you're the only one with the plot. I am not a fan of these plots but your story got me hooked. And the way you started it, the flashback is great. I find flashbacks as the start of the story amusing and creepy.
Characters: [20/20;]
Can I just skip this part and just give you the score? XD I have no words . Okay, maybe I have one, WOW.
Grammar and Spelling: [18/20;]
Is english your first language? Mmmm, good for you. I found little errors but nothing major about it. Just check the chapters once you have time, okay? :)
Flow: [15/15;]
The flow is great. Nothing to blabber about.
Structure: [5/5;]
I love your poster. It gives the angsty feels and it draws attention. Aside from fixing your phrasings at times, there's nothing more I could say.
REview is done.
REVIEW BY: DrunkenMaster
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