Title: It's Tae On!

Author: wondermickey

Story Link: It's Tae On!

Score: 82.5 /100

Title: [9/10;]

The title got me. It's cute and unique. It makes reader's curious... or maybe that's just in my case. What does the author mean, "It's Tae On"? It makes readers go and read the first two chapters just to know what Tae On means. So, good job for that!

Foreword/Description: [7/10;]

Your description kinda gave me the idea of the whole story already so... the curiousity your title gave me vanished. And the prologue could have been the chapter one. A foreword (for me) is a message by the author to the readers while a description is... plainly a little description of the story plot. It's not necessarily the summary of the whole story.

Your author's notes at the end of every chapter could be summarized and could be put on the foreword.

Maybe I can correct or improve your description.

"It all started when the school nerd got dumped. Kim Taehyun was humiliated by his long time crush, Chae TaeHee, right infront of the whole student body. It was then he realized that TaeHee isn'treally into guys like him and it seems that she likes to break hearts more than accept them." (I'll cut it here...)

"It all started when Kim TaeHyun got dumped. The poor guy lost a part of his humilty when his longtime crush, Chae TaeHee, nonchalantly broke his heart infront of the whole student body. A bolt of realization hit him, saying TaeHee is not interested in guys like him. The girl just seems to be more fond of breaking hearts than accepting them. That was when Kim TaeHyung's life took a big turn..."

In the new description, A reader may or may not be curious as to why TaeHee dumped Kim TaeHyung. Who is Kim TaeHyung? What is Kim TaeHyung? Why did he got dumped?, questions like that. "It all started when the school nerd ot dumped." It already gave readers an idea, that's minus one point in curiousity. The whole description is a big subtraction to a reader's curiousity.

Plot: [13/20;]

Mmm.Maybe it is original. But the whole idea, is kinda given already. It's cliché. It's about a nerd falling for the school queenka. I can't change that, but atleast put a very unexpected twist in the middle of the story to add little uniqueness in it. I've seen a lot of queenkaxnerd/kingkaxnerd here already.

Characters: [18/20;]

Nothing to change. Just a little advice tho, do not write many characters. It confuses.

Grammar and Spelling: [18/20;]

Le'mme see, Your grammar is fine but not great. Your spelling is fine too. Some grammar errors but nothing major so... I won't make some long paragraphs about this.

Oh wait, I did read something there, usually ellipses have three dots, [...]

Flow: [12.5/15;]

Okay, is it just me or you are really writing the story in that pace. If it's just me, I'll say your story is too fast. I mean, we had a heartbreak in the first half of chapter one then we have the make over in the second half of it. Atleast, make TaeHyung be sentimental for a chapter then push through the make-over.

And I did not expect a timid nerd to volunteer having a make-over. Usually, someone persuades him/her. But yeah, I guess that part is unique. You don't need to change it. :)

Structure: [5/5;]

And since your background and poster is fluffy... It matches, no words for this. :)

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REVIEW BY: DrunkenMaster