Title: To Break Me

Author: Lovex2254

Story link: To Break Me

Score: 98/100

Title: [9.5/10;]

Honestly, I didn't get the title. But it sure did a damn well job gaining my interest! It isn't a cute title nor a weird title. Actually, it fits the angsty feels. So I was like, "Oh, this is angst, I can see by the title." so I was expecting an action filled angsty story but it wasn't action filled, nonetheless, it sure did got me reading and waiting for more.

Foreword/Description: [10/10;]

I don't know, I just can't say anything about the description and foreword. It was perfect, honey. It was very clear; not too specific; your grammar and spelling is great!. Also, I liked how you incorporated Yuna's life with a book, a blank one. Should I not continue reviewing and just give you your much deserved score? haha.

Plot: [19.5/20]

The story is about a girl trying to escape from her father's grasp. Sure, the idea is overused, "I was like, oh, then her knight and shining armour will come and save the damsel in distress" but I was wrong, I did not expect a man to offer her an audition in one of the idol companies. That sure got me off-guard. I thought the story itself was going to be a normal love story but no. Good job for that, good job for that twist, and you're doing a good job in rewriting the story. :)

Characters: [20/20;]

I loved how you wrote Yuna's character. Very relateable and ver realistic. She has her flaws like all ther people here on Earth. Really, I have nothing to say. Now let me give you a pat on the back, *pats*

Grammar and Spelling: [20/20;]

Grammar and spelling were great. I hardly found errors so, perfect score for this.

Flow: [15/15;]

Very smooth. Not to fast nor too slow. Just smooth. Ugh.. should I really continue reviewing?

Structure: [4/5;]

The picture. I don't get it. I only have one question, Is the story a love story or just a friendship story?. Because I sure was expecting Zelo or Daehyun there. Yes, I get that the story is about Yuna's life but Zelo and the rest of B.A.P is a part of the story too. So, I think the rest of B.A.P (or Zelo atleast) should be on the picture. :).

Aside from that, I have no words.

A very short review because I lost my brain. haha! I loved your story, and yes, I haven't read "Rainbow" so I had no idea when I started to read. :)

REVIEW BY: DrunkenMaster