Reviewer : crystalline- || Story : Click

Title (3/5)
The title is a bit cliche and it gives out parts of the story at first glance. 

Originality (2.5/5)
The Foreword tells me how cliche Chunji and L.Joe are. No fights, everyone is jealous, no arguments, perfect. It's a bit unrealistic, which doesn't really make it original. 

Description/Foreword (3/5)
The grammar wan't that great. And the layout it sort-of messed up, maybe because of AFF'S change in the toolbar u-u. Otherwise, it was alright^^

Grammar (3.5/5)
Your grammar wan't that great tbh. You have unnessecary commas and wrong use of tenses. unu Ither than that you're fine. 

Spelling (5/5)
No complaints here ^^ 

Punctuation (4/5)
Like I said earlier, you have unessecary commas, like in chapter 13, Instead of: As I headed down the stairs, to my surprise, my dad and mum are having breakfast.It should be: As I headed down the stairs to my surprise, my dad and mum are having breakfast.Doesn't it look better? 

Diction or choice of words (4/5)

Vocabulary (5/5)

Characterization (7/10)
Like I said, L.Joe and Chunji were a bit cliche. 

Flow (6/10)
The flow was good, until Chunji was discharged from the hospital. The story just kept droning on, and I think it would be better if the story ended there when the results were shown. 

Enjoyment (6/10) 
I was quite dissappointed after Chunji was discharged, and the story wasn't that enjoyable in my opintion. 

Overall Score (5/10)




note; I'm sorry if I sound quite harsh. I'm just here to give you tops and help your writing skills, not to bring you down. I have faith in you author-nim ^^