Title: Be My Valentine
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/purp1e1i11y/
Reviewer: SuYinadmirer
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Title: 4/5
The title is familiar to some fanfics. I like it how you used the
words ‘Valentine’. I gave off the idea that you are using Valentines
are you main topic.
Forwards: 3.75/5
The forwards described the characters well in a short paragraph. It
did have some parts of the story in it, which was great. You did ask a
little too much questions but on average, it was adequate. The only
thing that gave you a low score is that I wouldn’t want to advance to
the next chapter that much unless I was doing a review. But never
less, I might look into the next chapter if I wasn’t really doing a
review.
Poster/Background/Format/Text: 13.5/15
That’s a pretty high score if you count it. One of the things is, you
use the right colour for the poster and the background. It reflected
the theme ‘love’. The words are easy to read too. It doesn’t cause
the readers to strain their eyes just to read the words, a really big
advantage. Just the poster had, ‘I ve never been in love’ instead of
‘I‘ve never been in love’.
Plot: 12/15
The plot was quite interesting with all the action and then romance.
It was funny too, I enjoyed reading it. Don’t worry that you didn’t
get a high score for this; I am very strict with this. The plot did
have some times when she was caught in an accident which was
intriguing. The plot also did lead from something to another, which
didn’t leave uninteresting chapters.
Flow: 6.5/10
Yet again, don’t get discouraged. It was just that your flow was a bit
too fast. Sometimes it would be a month later or a week or two later.
The events happened very fast too. The time when she was held
captured, telling, wasn’t very long. Also the time when she got into a
car accident, it should have someone sound effects or some feelings
when she was hit by the car.
Originality: 13/15
There are some fanfics with the same plot but they are not common. It
was hard deciding the score but I decided to be a bit generous. The
female lead knows martial arts but isn’t that common but also I have
the female lead know martial arts in my fanfic too.
Spelling/Grammar: 13/15
There aren’t much spelling and grammar mistakes. I have to give you
credit but you did leave out a couple of comma’s but then that’s fine.
Not everyone is perfect at everything. There was a bit off the points
because you did miss out some words in your sentences. Sorry for the
low score but grammar is something important to me so I can’t turn a
blind eye. It is one of the strictest things I judge. You also didn’t
use a lot of complex words. It would be good if you use a couple of
complex words, adding to the interest factor the fanfic might rise up
to.
Characters: 12.5/15
The characters were fine except you could use a real character instead
of _________. The main thing is that, why did you use two Minho‘s? It
will give you harder way of telling who is who and will sometimes make
the reader wonder which Minho it is.
Overall Enjoyment/Bonus: 4/5
I got trouble adjusting to the time. Even though you told when was
when, it was still a bit annoying to find the times that went to fast.
But I did enjoy his fanfic though. Keep up the good work!
Total score: 82.25/100
njoy his fanfic though. Keep up the good work!