Ensorcellment

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Come a little closer

hear my tale,

Of a prince and pauper

and a few other males

 

Veanging witches come in view,

All their lives goes astrew,

Angry husbands and boyfriends,

Go on journey full of suspense

 

So in this short poem I write for you to find

The answers to the questions you're asking in your mind

"Who exactly are these people?"

Find out in this tale called Ensorcellment

Foreword

Okay haha this is a contest entry to Weavers of Words, Spinners of Tales Fairytale Contest and is somewhat a spin off from my previous story Once Upon A Time. I'll post a summary of what happened in the previous story so if anyone is too lazy to read that story will be able to understand this a little more ^^

 

Prompt Used: The Sleeping Beauty

P.S. Thank You for holding this contest ;D

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Amalya #1
Chapter 2: This was a rather fun addition to the first story. It has some adventure and comedy and magic and romance and all that entertaining stuff. I liked some of the originality too with the fingernail key and I really did enjoy the way you pulled in some of the actual sleeping beauty story line with making the kingdom sleep and such. That was a good idea and while I appreciate the attention to detail in terms of the ruckus in the city, it seemed a little out of place. I had imagined it to be a pretty good and peaceful kingdom. It's definitely possible though so not a big deal there.

The Gnome Kingdom was interesting and it was intriguing, though somewhat off-putting, the way you pulled in other story elements or real world items. The dramas and TV shows were meant for comedic value, I know, but they felt sorely out of place to me. Likewise, it was strange to read Harry Potter references throughout. O.o And while the Pokemon one was funny, again, a little out of place. Then again, maybe the contest called for cross referencing. *shrug*

SNSD as witches was interesting though and EXO as gnomes was hilarious. I don't know how they ever got a reputation for being so awesome after the first day if no one ever made it past the first day (as I gathered from the lack of answers for the riddle - which was a good find by the way), but I liked the idea. The Wizard of Oz reference was funny though the worm caught me off guard.

I will give you props for not shying away from cruelty and brutality since it seemed to be something the witches in particular reveled in, though that was a rather unexpected and scary side of Onew at the end there. >.> Also, I loved the message you were trying to convey at the beginning. It might have been laid on a little thick but it is a good message.

I did enjoy it though! It was another interesting take on a Sleeping Beauty tale with a lot of its own individual twists. lol So kudos to you for the creativity there!
corinneniix #2
Chapter 2: Yay the yunboa was great!!
-Tigress- #3
Hi there! Remember that the deadline for story completion is December 8th!!! =)
corinneniix #4
It sounds good haha... is it gonna have some yunboa? I notice that BoA is also iin the tags haha!!!
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