Chapter 1: LOL the ninja hinja skills is a great phrase.
This fic was so crazy, really hyper. It was like reading something written by someone who has had one too many red bulls LOL.
I liked it though. There were some great descriptive details in this like about Luhan drooling a lot and the air condition on the bus and things...it really added depth to the story and made the reader able to imagine this happening.

I love how Luhan is so in denial about everything...from being a badass not badass to not being gay for Sehun.
It was good you put in that the ninja skills that a person would normally think of, are not the same type of ninja skills you actually mean.

Nice touch about Sehun being a cold distant jerk to Luhan though, it was different to other fanfics for sure.
There was lots of great humour in this and I enjoyed all the cameos from random people, it really made the story more amusing.

Great job! It was a crazy ride for sure.

Chapter 1: Okay. I honestly felt like I was listening to a hyperactive middle or high school student the entire time, which is saying something in that you never broke character. Not typically something I would read and it jumps very quick from point to point but it makes sense. lol While our definition of ninja skills are vastly different, I can safely see where you're coming from.

Luhan's mental commentary is pretty much priceless and he's all over the place all the time. I like how he insists he is a fanboy and not gay. That was funny. haha The characterizations made sense and some of the random appearances were unexpected but cute. Zelo's brief segment was strangely adorable, even if Luhan ditched him. -_- I think Suho's role was the only one that felt odd and well, it is what it is.

I'm jealous they have two story buses though. >.> That would have been so cool as a kid. hehe He definitely had nagging parents and some pretty bogus teachers, though the one did land him next to his idol. >:) I loved how Sehun really could have cared less. And I will say the ending was perfect. That was a very nice touch overall. Well played indeed.

Running from Krystal was good with the Taemin interference plan in effect seamlessly; the individual nicknames; the maegyo... O.o haha Lots of good points and I could at least empathize with the brothers in trying to stay under the radar with the parents and the whole laptop/watching television escapade.

It was certainly worth a laugh. Job well done!

Nice job done flamershawol. Hwaiting

Chapter 1: Lol this fanfic is awesome! and Hey! i'm the first to comment :D But, seriously this is hilarious! i love the sentences you use in this fanfic! good job authornim!!