ღ Review | Poodle vs Dino

rєvíєwєr: Ewongyanie

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ღTitle (3/5) : Being a title for a funny fluff fic, I guess the title does suit the story though it doesn't really attract me towards it. It was pretty cliche seeing that a lot of fics are named quite similar with the 'versus'.

ღPoster & Background (4/5) : The poster matched the story with that cute poodle and dino in it. Though, it would have matched a bit more if the poodle was a cartoon and if there wasn't an unnecessary pet store? But of course, it isn't your choice, so I won't penalize you on that. I also would have preferred if the background was a more subtle colour so it wouldn't clash with the poster, but like I said, it wasn't your fault. Both the poster and background was properly made with clear pictures so thumbs up for that.

ღForeword & Description (5/10) : You did have a bit of a thing going on there but it didn't really spark up the curiosity in me. And I can't quite connect the quote/slogan in the poster with that conversation that you had in description. Besides that, you didn't have a summary of the story. I wouldn't have mind if I understood your little conversation there but unfortunately, I didn't. It's good to give your readers an idea of what your story is about and what makes it special because all I understand is Jonghyun teasing Luna (like any other couple would) and that is very cliche.

ღPlot's uniqueness (9/20) : Judging based on the first chapter, the plot was cliche. A shy girl going to see her idol... embarassing herself in front of him... I don't know. Sounds a bit all too familiar, doesn't it? I can't really say much since there was only one chapter for me to read but I tried to give you more marks, I really did.

ღFlow (10/20) : Yet again, only one chapter and I can't do much. I don't know how many chapters you are going to write and stuff so I can't judge how fast you're going. I can see the a bit of the flow and it's going well but I'm not too sure about the random flashbacks. It's okay to have some but not too much to confuse the readers. I understand that the flashbacks start the story but I do hope that your upcoming chapters won't have too much of them.

ღGrammar and spelling (15/20) : Spelling is fine so far but there were some errors involving your grammar. It was still understandable, not to worry. Just that... I get the biggest confusion when I reach the 'recording session with Jonghyun' part. Other than that, it was okay and I know English is not your first language so it was a pretty good try that you can write like this.

ღWords (7/10) : I was pretty surprised when you mentioned that English is not your first language but managed to insert some 'quite' bombastic words in your story. I speak English all the time and I don't even use those words. That's very good!

ღInterest & enjoyment (5/10) : Maybe it's because of my love for shineeffects that I have a big expectation for it, so I didn't really quite like your story. A big part of the shineeffects stories have almost the same plot - love-hate relationship. I love fluff but I think it was too cliche for me. I feel like I can predict what's coming next.

ღOverall grade (58/100) : Gah, I feel so guilty for giving you such a low mark. You can ask for a redo and choose another author who's not so picky like me... However, I think it's better to be frank than feeding you with lies so yeah, this is what you get. About the character development thing that you wanted to know, your characters are fine. Luna isn't being all perfect and stuff so I really like the realisticness of it. How to improve yourself? Try to twist your plot a little bit. For example, instead of making Luna embarass herself, let Jonghyun have a turn. Maybe you can write on his side also. That's all I can say, it's up to you to write it. Hwaiting!