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✏Originality: 23/30 (how original your story is)

- It may not be the most original plot but I think everyone is entitled to show their own flavour, style and version of this idea.

✏IdeA: 25/30 (how interesting your ideas are) -

- I love your ideas. I felt connected but at some point I wonder about some things like who was she? A friend? A staff under Baekhyun’s family? How were they connected? Also there’s also a part where I wanted to know what was the turning point for her to let it all go?

✏The Idea Presentation: 23/30 (how you present the idea itself) -

-The description really gets to you… It really appealed to me that I was really anticipating on what your story was about.

-This is the part where it gets tricky and what I think is very vital. 
I was a little concerned about the transitions. It’s okay to jump from one scene to another. The first two paragraphs was nicely constructed if I ignore the grammar(it’s not part of the scoring system but affects the appeal of the story). I would have asked for more details about the time of her death. It was just a shame to write a short sentence on it and then jump to her letter. I think more details on her suicide and her letter would create a deeper impression on your readers.

✏Bonus: 6/10 (determines whether the reviewers would want to read till the end) -

-This is not because I didn't like your story. As a matter of fact, I enjoyed reading it but because of the sad ending, I was a little hesitant to read the end.

SCORE: 77%