First Night

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Mika's POV

I had been playing with Taemin for almost two hours! And he keeps on winning. My streak of luck ended, I only won two times against him.

"Noona, I beat you again!" Taemin teases me.

"I'll beat you next time!" I pretended to be mad.

"Noona, I-I'm sorry, I didn't mean to offend you" Taemin stuttered.

"Oh, c'mon Taeminnie, I was only joking" I smiled and hug him so tight.

"Noona, I can't breathe" Taemin is gasping for air.

"Sorry my minnie, I didn't mean to hurt you" I apologize.

"Did you just call me minnie noona?" he asked.

"Yes, from now on I'll call you minnie. You're cute and it suits you" I said.

Jonghyun appeared from nowhere and sat beside Taemin.

"Taemin-ah, can you get me some water? I'm kinda thirsty" Jonghyun said.

"Okay hyung, just a minute" he obediently obeyed.

When Taemin was out of sight, Jonghyun spoke.

"Mika, would it be okay" he paused for a while then continued, "would it be okay if I ask you out tomorrow night?"

"Yeah sure, there's no problem with that. I would love to" I said smiling at him, I have to be nice to everyone. Except for Key, that arrogant Diva!

"Hyung, here's your water." Taemin handed him the water.

"Thank you Taemin-ah, you really are good. Be good to your noona, don't make her feel left alone okay? Take care of her when I'm not here" Jonghyun said to Taemin and looked at me smiling then he walked away.

Jonghyun's POV

Did she really just accepted my invitation? Way to go Jonghyun! I can't wait till tomorrow night comes, wait hold it right their Kim Jonghyun. Why are you excited all of a sudden? It's only a dinner, why so excited? I had been going out with other girls, but I had never felt this way before. Am I in love? Hey Jonghyun, snapped out of it okay?! I need to be sure first.

"I'm home" I heard Key's voice, I rushed into him and I hugged him verrry tight!

"You're home yeobo! I'm glad you're here" I said.

Key's POV

"I'm home" I shouted so everyone wil

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Issdnn #1 Jul 12, 2015 08:57:59

Chapter 92: Okay, I'm reading this on 2015 and you probably won't reply my comment but oh well, at least I've tried to tell my thoughts to you.
I read ALL of the chapters without exception. Actually I agree with the review that said the flow is really fast. I think there's not too many confilcts, or which I should say that you're stuck with one conflict and you bring it for so many chapters and it does not really interesting because some of the readers probably have guessed what would happen next (like Jessica's conflict). And I actually hope you could extend the part where Yui and Jonghyun getting along with each other (as a side story because I really think it's interesting) rather than bringing Jessica's case for too long (Key and Mika have 2 fights because Jessica, am I right?)
HOWEVER, I think this story is not as bad as the reviewer's think. I enjoy and understand quite much, but I do agree that sometimes it seems unrealistic. Well, for the typo I COMPLETELY understand. I know some people can't write on Microsoft Office Word for some reasons (actually I've been writing through Memopad, Email, etc.)
And for grammar and vocabulary, I think it's not that bad too. For people who doesn't speak English (me too), I think THE VERY FIRST POINT is people UNDERSTAND what you're trying to say. No matter it's a mix past and present tense (okay I know IT IS ACTUALLY NOT GOOD), the most important thing (esp for amateur) is people get what you mean. BECAUSE IT WILL BE USELESS TO FOCUS JUST ON THE PAST/PRESENT TENSE. (Pls do not misunderstood of what I mean)
And lastly, I just want to tell you that there are some people think that they made stories to please others, to satisfy others. However, there are some people too that think they made stories to satisfy themselves, for their needs. And I'm the second. I choose to write to satisfy my needs. I care for other's opinions, I considerate their words within my stories. I'm trying to be open BUT it should not affect my ideas.
Good job♡

-2Mirae- ^{14 streak} #2 Aug 4, 2013 18:05:41

Chapter 92: even though the person who reviewed this story said she couldnt continue finishing i thought the story was awesome ^^ even though you have a bit of grammar mistake you could correct yourself next time ^^
i really enjoyed reading this ^^

locketblingermvp #3 Jul 4, 2013 10:58:38

Chapter 92: Wow... it's my third time reading... and wow.... i love it... SOOOO MUCH! Thank youuuuuuuu!! U r awesummmmmmm