Title: The answer that will change you
Author: luvleeRian
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Title: 4/5
Appearance: 4/5
Description & Foreword: 11/15
Plot: 25/30
Grammar, Vocabulary & Punctuation: 28/30
Flow: 8/10
Interest: 5/5
Total: 85/100
Grade: B

Title:
Should be in capital letters as it is a title. Like: The Answer That Will Change You

Appearance:
Has a poster :)

Description & Foreword:
Good :)

Plot:
Quite a common plot. The girl has an arranged marriage and falls in love with the guy? You can add some drama to make your story more interesting than the normal ones.

Grammar, Vocabulary & Punctuation:
Good, keep it up!

Flow:
Okay. :>

Interest:
I love arranged-marriage kind and it's Kai!! <3

How To Improve:

1.  Grammatical/Vocabulary Errors
►Chapter 1
Orig. The sun was shining brightly in your face when you were still in bed, you read the clock on your nightstand and it read; 10:00 o'clock am. 
Should Be: The sun was shining brightly in your face when you were still in bed, you read the clock on your nightstand and it read; 10:00am.
It's your own choice to use o'clock or am, but I think am is clearer as to whether it is morning or night. O'clock and am is the same.
►Chapter 2
Orig. When you came downstairs your father was waiting for you in front of the door looking at his watch from time to time to make sure they wouldn’t be late. 
Should Be: When you went downstairs, your father was waiting for you at the door looking at his watch from time to time to make sure you wouldn't be late.
I think in front of the door sounds funny... Since your writing in third person perspective, it's "you".