Title: Can I believe you?
Author: gure321
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Title: 4/5
Appearance: 4/5
Description & Foreword: 13/15
Plot: 28/30
Grammar, Vocabulary & Punctuation: 26/30
Flow: 8/10
Interest: 5/5
Total: 88
Grade: B

Title:
Yup the story isn't that developed yet, so I don't really know whether the title fits in with the story yet ^-^

Appearance:
Pictures match with the character files.

Description & Foreword:
Same as title, I don't know yet, so do update soon :)

Plot:
Interesting plot!! :) Hmmm I am kinda guessing the boy that JeIn slept with is from EXO? Just a guess C:

Grammar, Vocabulary & Punctuation:
Not many mistakes, some I will cover under "How to Improve" part.

Flow:
Same as title too! I must read at least 3/4 of the story ^~^ But its going well as of now! :)

Interest:
Since its EXO, 5 :D

Other Comments:

I wonder what is Sehun's role in this story! Aigoo he is my bias >.<

How To Improve:

1. Grammatical/Vocabulary Errors - I'll correct some of the mistakes you have made ^^
►Chapter 2: 
Orig. I woke up as the sun came through the glass doors.
Should Be: I woke up as the sun rays came/shone through the glass doors.
Haha it's a bit funny on how would the sun actually come through the glass doors xD
►Chapter 2:
Orig. I cut off the conversation and walked towards the new made mall.
Should Be: I cut off the conversation and walked towards the newly-opened mall.
New made mall is actually grammatically already wrong, if you want to say that, it should be newly-made mall. But isn't it a bit odd like its a newly-made mall? You don't make a mall, you build it.
►Chapter 2:
Orig. “Yah! Why aren’t you answering? I shouted on top of my lungs! Did you not hear me?”
Should Be: “Yah! Why aren’t you answering? I shouted at the top of my lungs! Did you not hear me?”
►Chapter 3:
Orig. Normal fan-girls like Eun Mi would be screaming and taking photos of them and follow them wherever they go like a stalkers. 
Should Be: Normal fan-girls like Eun Mi would be screaming, taking photos of them and following them wherever they go like a stalker.
Tenses should be the same and avoid using 2 "ands" in 1 sentence.

2. Spelling Errors 
►Chapter 3:
Orig. I took out my phown from my side pocket.
Should Be: I took out my phone from my side pocket.
►Chapter 3:
Orig. When we were infront of the shop, .........
Should Be: When we were in front of the shop, .........
"In front of" are three different words.
►Chapter 4:
Orig.  I accidently blurted out some nonsense. 
Should Be: I accidentally blurted out some nonsense.

Done^^ If I spot anymore I will add in! :))