: Review for veneficious
by Luvkookietae > Title: Intersomnia
> author: veneficious Yeri is on the verge of ending her life, and she's thrown into a different world when she attempts to take her life. She jumps off the building of her apartment, and ends up in Johnny's dream realm. She and Johnny become acquainted and find they share similarities and interests, but Johnny's real world is a thousand years into the future. Score: 63%
> Title: 10/10
> Description: 7/10
> Plot: 15/20
> Characterization: 15/20
> Grammar: 16/20
> enjoyment: 6/10  : The review 1. Title : 10/10

Your title is excellent. There's no way to describe how good this is. the word itself holds a deep meaning, something that connects clearly with the story itself, and there's a certain poetic feel to it that made me instantly attracted, and made me want to check it out. I like how you shaped the title to have a deeper underlying meaning, and in it I could see why the story was called as such. I was tempted to cut off marks at the "Oneshot" word, but then I decided to overlook it (Barely). It's better if you don't write something like that, it sounds weird LOL. 2. Description : 7/10

You know what? This wasn't what I'd call a description, if you're talking serious stuff with fancy words and all that bull, but this had a ring of something like a whispered promise (Maybe just my overactive imagination), but then I could almost see Yeri talking, and that image just flashed so vividly inside my head I was shocked for a moment. BUt then I cut marks, because it wasn't exactly a description, but I won't recommend you change it. It's great as it is. 3. Plot : 15/20

To be honest, I've never read something like this, It was kind of refreshing, actually. SOmetimes a short, clean oneshot is better than something with a long, complicated, plot twist (which is more my style), but then, there was some lacki