Susakaele

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by kpoplover627 > Title: The Fallen
> author: Susakaele A fallen Guardian who had been wrongly accused, a human orphan who was supposed to be only a sacrifice, and the verge of the greatest battle to ever shake the two realms. Score: 0%
> Title: 9/10
> Description: 6/10 
> Plot: 19.5/20
> Characterization: 20/20
> Grammar: 20/20
> enjoyment: 7/10  : The review 1. Title : 9/10

Honestly i gotta be real with you. if i were to scroll down the feed looking for a new story to read and i come across your title “The Fallen”, there's a 9/10 chance of me clicking on it.

The 90% chance of me clicking on it just from the title is because the word Fallen.

The theology of Fallen means to subject to sin or depravity, also as the word is a negative word which catches a person eye more than a positive word. The 10% chance of me not clicking on it as it is a very common title and it's not that unique.

2. Description : 6/10

Description: 4/10 Forward:8/10 = 6/10

Your description made me think i was reading tags. If i to read this to you i'll just read fallen guardian, human orphan, and a great battle. That's because you didn't have enough information in your description. I understand that the guardian was wrongly accused and that the human was supposed to be a sacrifice, but that's all i know about characters. Overall there needs to be more information in your description and it needs to be ordered correctly.

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CrazyJackson
#1
can we be affiliates?
Shu867
#2
Chapter 10: thanks so much for the detailed review! I've always had trouble with my pacing, haha...when I write, I don't have a predetermined plot or anything, I just make up the chapters as I go (it leads to super inconsistent writing XD)
the long wait is fine, I've been busy as well. I did better than I expected...heh I know I have a lot to improve on, but I started writing early so I have a lot of time to get better~
again, thanks so much! will definitely request here in the future, crediting soon
ambrozia
#3
i've submitted a request! :-)
-midnightbae
#4
Chapter 9: I’ve read the review!! I didn’t mind the wait, I was busy also with school and I understand you must have more important stuff to do hehe nevertheless I really liked the review! tysm for being honest! :) out of all the reviews I have requested this must be my fave (lol maybe because it’s my highest remark?) I really enjoyed reading ur review and I will consider ur suggestions! more love to ur shop xoxo
kamski
#5
I've submitted a request!
sharpteeth
#6
Chapter 8: i think the link to this fic is broken?
veneficious #7
Chapter 8: Picking up the review and thank you! You had me laughing through the whole review hahaha. Unfortunately, I'm actually a terrible writer, I usually only do straight pairings and I can't do anything more than a few chapters. I'm completely uncommitted T_T Thank you for your review nonetheless! No worries for the long wait, I appreciate your honestly. xD I definitely wanted Johnny to be more likable than Yeri, but a typical guy... hahahaha. I definitely understand personal preferences and differences between readers. Another reviewer scored this story a .90/100, whereas you scored it a .70/100. Both are good for me. I'm just glad the story made any sense at all. Thanks again for the review! :)
Shu867
#8
hi, sent a request!