Right off the bat, I’m going to be brutally honest with you. I didn’t know where this story was going to lead me to. Usually, readers would section your story into a type of genre based on its title. ‘Whims of a Child’ made me think that it would be more of a ‘slice of life’ genre yet it was actually historical-themed/romance which was a very pleasant surprise! It felt as if I had cracked open into a shell, to find a pearl inside(seriously speaking I was amazed!)

I would suggest considering changing the title. I understand how the title itself has to do with the fact that both your main characters met as children in both their past and present life and how their relationship at the time of childhood was much easier compared to when they were older. Yet, I feel you could come up with a title more accurate and interesting to steer readers on the right path. Do consider this yeah? :)

It was too generic. :( I wish you had included more information in it. Your description was more focused on the relationship of the characters, rather than the characters themselves. I was given this advice by my literature teacher; to think about 3 main things when writing a summary/description

1. Who is my character?

2. What is my character’s dream/main goal?

3. What can I do to prevent my character in achieving that goal, in every unimaginable way possible?

Point no. 3 is what drives your character up against the walls and push them to insanity, and it will have the same effect on your readers when you use this method correctly. (don’t worry it takes some time to master this, even I have problems making it work but it’s good to keep in mind.)

Try keywords like Warrior and Healer, this would indicate the historical-themed part. And maybe include how they met again in the modern world Seoul. BUT keep the part where you said “Did you love me?” followed by, “More than I should have, more than I ever thought I could have.” : this was beautiful, it felt like a stab to the heart!

OHmyGOD where do I even start! I love this! I finished the 7 chapters you wrote in one sitting and need more! I’m subscribed and personally will look forward to your updates!

During the time I was reading your writing, I was particularly surprised at how smooth your story flowed. It didn’t feel like there was a jarring gap between chapters even though they were quite short. The transition from the ‘past’ in the prologue to ‘present’ in the following chapters felt very smooth and realistic. Most authors sometimes insert unnecessary flashbacks in between present events, which I personally find annoying. However, your plot was running smoothly! Great job! I would say you did well on the ex