: Review for Shu867
by luvkookietae > Title: unorthodox relationships
> author: shu867 moonsun + seulrene college au. 
Solar and Moonbyul are best friends; people are just waiting for them to confess. Irene meets Seulgi at a coffee shop, where Seulgi proceeds to mess up her order every single time; despite this, Irene can't seem to stop coming back. Score: 76%
> Title: 8/10
> Description: 8/10
> Plot: 15/20
> Characterization: 18/20
> Grammar: 20/20
> enjoyment: 7/10  : The review 1. Title : 8/10
Okay I'll have to admit: Your title drew me in. It's not a common word, 'Unorthodox'; most people just use 'unusual' in its place. But then as I read on, i discovered that your story doesn't really fit its title? Unorthodox means contrary to what is usual, traditional, or accepted, but then you never mentioned that in he story, same gender relationships were stranger than normal. Unorthodox relationships basically means non -traditional relationships, but you don't seem to make an emphasis on that in your story. Think about it. 2. Description : 8/10
First Thing: Your description is super cute. I mean, who writes simple, easy descriptions any more? (NOT me) People nowadays love fancy scripture and plain weird vocabs, but yours is super refreshing. BUt why I cut marks off was the first four words: The 'Seulrene+Moonsun College Au'. Your decription is the first thing people see before they click into the story, so I recommend moving that to the bottom of the description. That's all. 3. Plot : 15/20
Cliche. I have no idea how to explain this further. You're 13, I get it (I'm a year older LOL) but your story is like oneof those classi