Ostentatious

Personal Sunshine
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     It's been awhile and since the thing happened everything has calmed down. Thank goodness the two of us (especially me) have become less awkward around each other. Just took some time to get used to it, you know, being together.

 

     Regardless he doesn't really want to tell the rest of the group about us because he feels like be doing that we will out the others who are also in relationships. Which is fully understandable. I just don't want to lie anyone anymore. Considering I would do the same if I was dating a girl, I would want my members to meet the person I was with.

 

     Besides all this, we've had some really close calls with some members. Hyojong would steal a kiss whenever he got the chance to. When we had a moment during practice as the other happened to look the other direction happened to get distracted and look the other direction. He would kiss me. Although when he did, it made me anxious but also left me slightly sad because his lips would linger. I couldn't help but want more. Then again personal space within the dorm is hard to find. If I lock my door for a bit someone is bound to come knocking.

 

     He sat in front of me in our van as we traveled to the next event on our schedule. I was in back with Shinwon sitting next to me.

 

     I don't remember what was on the schedule for us today but I already want to go home.

 

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     As our next event on our agenda finished, as we piled back into our van to head to our final appointment. Hyojong grabbed onto my as I went in, is what I initially thought but as I turned around my jaw dropped. Hyojong had Shinwon by the collar and Hyunggu stood watching in shock.

 

     “What are you doing?” I yelled out.

 

     “It was only a joke” Shinwon said stuttering.

 

     “Whatever” Hyojong uttered sourly letting Shinwon out of his grasp.

 

     Hyojong shooed me further into the van and sat down beside me in the back.

 

     Hyunggu opened up the passenger side door and quickly made Shinwon get in.

 

     Hongseok slowly followed behind our manager because he tried to escape to other van again and so the manager had to go fetch him. So they didn't know what happened a few moments ago. As Hongseok climbed in, he sat in the seat in front Hyojong. Hyunggu was awkwardly sitting in front of me looking out the window. The atmosphere was off and everyone could tell. To try and shake the feeling off, our manager the radio.  I felt my phone vibrate, so I reached into my pocket to see what it was about. A text from Hongseok asking why there was a lingering dread in the air. With a short a explanation, he was quickly informed of what exactly happened. I side glanced over Hyojong and he was sitting with his arms crossed while looking out the window.

 

/Not gonna name any names, but someone is jealousss/ I could sense the saltiness in his text.

 

/I want to tell the others in our dorm at least but Hyojong doesn't want to out you in the process/ I heard him snort at my reply.

 

/Since Jinho is in the other dorm, I don't think anyone will find out. Plus if they do, the both of us don't mind  because it'll happen one day/ After reading his text, I let out a sigh of relief.

 

/can you call a group meeting when we get back home?/ with a quick text back, Hongseok sent back a few emoji’s as his reply. Two thumbs up emoji’s and the one face with sunglasses on. So I guess that's a yes.

 

     I can't have Hyojong manhandling everyone that shows skin ship towards me. I couldn't help but pout as I looked at him. I extended my arm out to try and communicate with him. When he finally returned my gaze, I could see in his eyes that he knew that he was out of line. He held onto my hand for a bit, squeezed slightly before releasing and looking back out the window.

 

     The whole ride

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Hello everyone, I have a new huidawn fic. If you'd like to check it out its called Summer Storm.

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LoveKpopPortugal_14 #1
Chapter 9: This story was great!!! I love it
LoveKpopPortugal_14 #2
Chapter 8: Omg so cuteeeee!!
LoveKpopPortugal_14 #3
Chapter 2: I love ur writing authornim ♥
kevinwoodrunk #4
Chapter 9: Omg >.< Please update, Huidawn is a ship that needs so much more love!
secretlurve
#5
Chapter 9: Aww, this is so cute. Edawn is so cute. Everyone is happy. Is the story already finished?

Anyway.

Your writing is a bit stiff. Or awkward. How do we call it? Like, there are some parts which are not exactly clear in the way you describe it. It's not that they can't be understand, but eh. I think it's the lack of emotion play part in this.

Ex: There he was standing there with the cutest look on his face. Slowly he made his final steps to remove my hands from my face.

(I wrote back this snippet from this chapter)

I would like to know what kind of cute face Edawn is making. Is the lazily pulled smile on his sleepy face made him look cute? Or does he smile widely in a way Hui never see that it just tug his heart? And how about Hui himself? What is his reaction? Perhaps his face reddened and he leaned down to conceal more of his blush.

I won't say you are bad though. You are getting better by each chapter and I think you should just continue what you do. Because the newer chapters are slowly becoming smoother in the sense of sentences writing.

And make sure to have punctuation marks in your dialogues. You tend to leave them. :)

This story has a light conflict, in which these boys has the problem to confess to their crushes. Understandable, and while I have read a few of this type of fics before, I have to say that I like these kind of fic, because, you know. The light angst and partial fluff is just making me want to read more, although I know how it will end.

And that is always because of the characterization, I think. There aren't big characters development going around, but something is changing, and that's enough to be a good story.

You will grow more in writing, and you are doing good already. :)
heavell_
#6
Chapter 9: hello there!! just wanted to say that this is really good so far!!
i hope you plan on continuing this~
NCTRASHP #7
Chapter 9: Update soon auhornim, Craving for more HuiDawn (╯з╰)
NCTRASHP #8
Chapter 7: I like savage Hyojong actually ahhahaha Hope that Changgu confess already so that my ships are already on point hahahaha
NCTRASHP #9
Chapter 6: Darn Hwi hahahaha Finally Hyojong knows it, don't ever hurt your Hwi please oh and Yanan your still a baby XD
NCTRASHP #10
Chapter 3: Hahahah i'm basically laughing fof HongMom hahahaa