The Crazy Life of Kim Family

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Foreword

Well, the story is not necessarily revolving around only Sehun but all the other member of the family as well. The family consist of EXO member and after a few chapter, there would be Mino from Winner, BTOB Sungjae the magnae of BTOB, and Minhyuk the oldest.

 

Also, their role is not necessarily idols and some of them was even far younger than the real them in real life. I put down their age around 7-8 years altogether. So Sehun and EXO magnae line is around 15 years old in this story.

When you read, makes sure to positioned yourself in Eunhwa's (OC) position. If you were born 92 or older it would be even easier for you because you already positioned yourself as a noona already. 

Or to be easy, just imagine them to be a little younger then they are now and you to be a little older. Hahaha, it would make it easier for you to feel the story.

The story consist , and straight love, too. For you shipper, I promise I won't ruin your imagination. So just try to read it and make sure to tell me your opinion later. <3 <3 <3

This story is unbeta'd. So I feel sorry for all the grammar mistakes, which I believe will be a lot, and have fun! :D

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secretlylovingexo
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WoodWitchofSuburbia #1
Chapter 6: Alrighty, just finished reading everything you have updated so far.

I do want to say that I saw a lot of grammatical mistakes. I'm assuming English probably isn't your first language, so the mistakes are understandable.

I also think that maybe you should focus more on what it is about Eunhwa that Sehun and the rest of the boys like? Right now, we have no reason to really believe the boys have any reason to like her (at least Sehun). It's hard to believe that Sehun would be having these feelings over a girl he knows nothing about and has shared almost no interaction with.

Maybe focus on description more in some areas. Scenes seem to fly by, and they don't give us enough time to really comprehend what's going on. For instance, in the first chapter, describe Sehun's experience in the orphanage. Did he like it there? Was he glad to finally be adopted? Did he have friends at the orphanage? Describe more of his life in the orphanage, give us some background information, help us to learn more about who he is.

Also, I'm not really sure how someone can adopt someone into being their sibling. Adoption only really entails taking on a child as their parent, and it costs a lot of money and filling out lots of paperwork. You can't just go straight into an orphanage and say: I want that one. It's not the same thing as a pound, it doesn't really work that way. If you were to re-write your first chapter, you could use this as a way to talk more about Sehun's experiences at the orphanage while also giving him time to develop feelings for Eunhwa before he's finally adopted by her. That alone will add so much more to your story and allow the readers to empathize with the characters better.

I'd write a longer comment, but AFF won't let me, ha ha! If you have any more questions about what I've said, feel free to message me ~
secretlylovingexo #2
Chapter 4: Actually there is a mistake on updating the chapter. There should be one more chapter between this and the third chapter. I will fix it later.
Like I mention in the last part of the chap right now Im far away from my laptop so update will be a hard thing for me right now. So please be patient guys. Love you.
MyStarryNight #3
Chapter 1: Sehun got adopted! Sehun is smart
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