Chapter 5 : A Day of Work

Undefeatable Heartbreakers

       You woke up at 4 in the morning. You got dressed in the bathroom and took your backpack full of equipment with you. You thought of leaving a note for L.Joe, but why would he care about where you're going? You got out and took the elevator to the first floor. You walked toward to a girl behind a desk.

        "Um excuse me, could I please have a job?"you asked kindly. The girl stopped typing and gave you a smile.

        "Sure, you're lucky we only have one spot left. It's for a custodian, are you okay with that?"she handed you a job application.

        "Yes that's perfect."you said happily. You filled in the application and gave it back to her.

        "Great! So here is your uniform and you'll start work tomorrow at 5 in the morning."she said handing you your nicely folded uniform.

        "Tomorrow?! No I want to start work today."you said.

        "Wow, I've never seen anyone wanting work so badly, but then again the economy's pretty bad in money right now."she said. You looked at her name tag which said,Veronica. 

        "Listen um..Veronica, I don't want this job for money. I'm an undercover agent."you said to her a bit quietly. 

        "Yeah, and I'm a unicorn."she responded quickly. 

        "No really I'm not kidding."you took out your undercover agents badge and showed it to her. 

        "Wow you really weren't kidding. " she said admiring your golden badge.

        "So Vero, can I call you that?"you said putting the badge away. 

        "Yeah."she said sounding interested in what you're saying. 

        "Okay so Vero, is there any way I can start work today?"you asked.

        "No sorry,it's the boss's rules."she said. You sighed, but then remembered something. 

        "Vero, do you know where's the nearest bank?"you asked her.

        "Yeah,you go outside turn right, then walk straight and turn right at the corner, then you walk 3 blocks down and there you'll see it."she said.

        "Okay thanks!"you said putting your uniform in your backpack.  You walked outside and followed her directions. It was early so there wasn't as much people on a regular day.

     When you got there you talked to the manager if you could install hidden cameras. He said yes after he saw your badge. He said his name was Luhan. He was really kind to you, and you felt like you could trust him.

 

 

 

 

So what did you think of this chapter? :D

Like this story? Give it an Upvote!
Thank you!

Comments

You must be logged in to comment
Lesleyanne
#1
Chapter 10: Hey! Just read your update! Those visions make me kind of curious as to what L.Joe really did to her at the cinemaplace lol. If it had anything to do with that. I hope he didn't drug her or anything. xD
Thanks for the update btw! It's great seeing you update!
Lesleyanne
#2
Chapter 8: Hey! I'm glad to see an update! Haha. Truthfully, I read this earlier today while I was at the mall lol. I kinda laughed at the beginning, where Luhan was described to be 'waving the hot dogs in the air', cause I could almost picture him doing that it was hilarious! But, but he's succumbing to their plan.... :( Even though I don't know what it is, he went with them!
And I should have realized this earlier but it was a bit of a shocker for me to find out L.Joe was working with the criminals. But then I realized it kinda pieced most of what had happened in the earlier chapter, together. That makes things alot more interesting!
Btw, in this chapter, the perspective of which you're writing in gets quite confusing. Because when you say "You", it usually refers to us, readers, as the OC Kim. But when you said "Don't you think?" at the scene where L.Joe had tied them up on a tree, it made it seem you were talking to your audience rather than referring to Kim. I don't know if i'm making sense DD:

But nonetheless, I love hearing that you're enjoying while writing your story! Personally, I feel that's all that counts. Somehow I felt happy reading that bit! Thank you so much for the update! <3 I look forward to the next! <3
Lesleyanne
#3
Chapter 7: Aww! You mentioned me! <3 I feel so touched! <3 I haven't been on AFF for so long, so I wouldn't know any more means to get your story noticed. However, I do agree that it's all patience. Also, I feel if you naturally just enjoy writing your story, your readers will enjoy it as much as you do. Don't rush. Your fanfic will get the attention it deserves! :)
This chapter was rather short. However, I liked how you ended it. I kept scrolling down to see if there was a continuation lol. Looking forward to the next!
Fighting! <3
LittleStarinthesky
#4
love the concept, very refreshing! ^ ^
Lesleyanne
#5
Heeey! I like the concept of your story! Firstly, there aren't that many fanfictions revolved around secret agents and what not so it brings a different kind of twist to general fanfictions. Secondly, it also brings alot of anticipation and excitement as to what may come about next. Your story is also written well, so that's wonderful to see!
I was given this piece of advice too when I first started writing my first fanfic. Why don't you add more tags to your story to get it more noticed? I hope it helps!

P.S. I'm kind of an exo fan. So it was a plus point for me to see Luhan in the picture! Fighting author-nim! <3
aegyo-wink #6
Chapter 2: Exciting! It's really good so far!