Chapter 3 : The Fast Getaway

Undefeatable Heartbreakers

       

“Ugh!!” you threw your hands in frustration,dropping the suitcase near you.

     “Okay so let’s make this simple,you stand still while we tie these ropes around you and you don’t get hurt. Oh wait, where are my manners,any last words?” one of the girls,that looked like the leader,said.

     “Ummmm…...goodbye” you quickly grabbed a rope from the nearest girl and tied them all together. ‘ I’m glad those airheads were stupid enough to not spread out.’ you thought. You made a knot that only your boss had taught you. It was simple but tricky to get out of.

      “You’ll pay for this! Just wait until we get our hands on you! You’ll wish you were never born!”the girl that looked like the leader said.

      “I’m sorry your plan didn’t work,but your welcome to stay in my room for as long as you want.” you said grabbing your suitcase and headed out the door. You didn’t mind them being in there. I mean what could they steal? You always hid all your precious possessions.If they wanted to steal something valuable,they’d have to look hard.

        By the time you got out of your room,you saw that the purple haired girl was calmly walking toward the boss. She was not that far from reaching him,but you were very far from both of them. You were mad at her and didn’t want to lose your job. So you did the usual thing any agent would do, knock ‘em down!

        You ran,dodging people in your way and hoping over any obstacle. When you were close enough you tackled her down and got on top of her,while holding her hands on her back like as if you were a cop putting handcuffs on a bad guy.

        “Awe,you really wanna be my partner that badly?” you heard a familiar voice say. You turned up to see L.Joe,your enemy,right next to the boss.

        “That’s enough Agent K you don’t want to hurt her.” the boss said. You got off of the girl and grabbed your suitcase.

         “Sorry” you said to her. She got up and gave you a death glare before she left. Everyone walked outside to see 2 planes ready for flight. Not all agents were going,only the best were picked.

         “Alright everyone find your partners and get in your planes!” the boss yelled out loud. You walked next to L.Joe.

         “Hey,not to close! I have to have my personal space!” he said suddenly annoyed. You rolled your eyes,but instead of moving farther away,you moved closer.

         “Didn’t you hear what I said?!” he stopped and went in front of you to look at you in the eyes.

         “I did.” you said looking at him in the eyes.

         “And?!” he took a step closer.

         “So what,do you feel uncomfortable around me?” you smirked and took a step closer.

         “Not one bit.” he smirked and took a step closer. Your bodies were now touching. You felt surprised by his move,but you weren’t gonna give in easily. You both skipped a heartbeat, but ignored it.

         “I thought so.” you shoved him and hurried to be next to your boss,leaving L.Joe to run after you.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I would be glad if you please leave a comment. It's my first time writing a fanfic and I want to know how I'm doing.

 
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Lesleyanne
#1
Chapter 10: Hey! Just read your update! Those visions make me kind of curious as to what L.Joe really did to her at the cinemaplace lol. If it had anything to do with that. I hope he didn't drug her or anything. xD
Thanks for the update btw! It's great seeing you update!
Lesleyanne
#2
Chapter 8: Hey! I'm glad to see an update! Haha. Truthfully, I read this earlier today while I was at the mall lol. I kinda laughed at the beginning, where Luhan was described to be 'waving the hot dogs in the air', cause I could almost picture him doing that it was hilarious! But, but he's succumbing to their plan.... :( Even though I don't know what it is, he went with them!
And I should have realized this earlier but it was a bit of a shocker for me to find out L.Joe was working with the criminals. But then I realized it kinda pieced most of what had happened in the earlier chapter, together. That makes things alot more interesting!
Btw, in this chapter, the perspective of which you're writing in gets quite confusing. Because when you say "You", it usually refers to us, readers, as the OC Kim. But when you said "Don't you think?" at the scene where L.Joe had tied them up on a tree, it made it seem you were talking to your audience rather than referring to Kim. I don't know if i'm making sense DD:

But nonetheless, I love hearing that you're enjoying while writing your story! Personally, I feel that's all that counts. Somehow I felt happy reading that bit! Thank you so much for the update! <3 I look forward to the next! <3
Lesleyanne
#3
Chapter 7: Aww! You mentioned me! <3 I feel so touched! <3 I haven't been on AFF for so long, so I wouldn't know any more means to get your story noticed. However, I do agree that it's all patience. Also, I feel if you naturally just enjoy writing your story, your readers will enjoy it as much as you do. Don't rush. Your fanfic will get the attention it deserves! :)
This chapter was rather short. However, I liked how you ended it. I kept scrolling down to see if there was a continuation lol. Looking forward to the next!
Fighting! <3
LittleStarinthesky
#4
love the concept, very refreshing! ^ ^
Lesleyanne
#5
Heeey! I like the concept of your story! Firstly, there aren't that many fanfictions revolved around secret agents and what not so it brings a different kind of twist to general fanfictions. Secondly, it also brings alot of anticipation and excitement as to what may come about next. Your story is also written well, so that's wonderful to see!
I was given this piece of advice too when I first started writing my first fanfic. Why don't you add more tags to your story to get it more noticed? I hope it helps!

P.S. I'm kind of an exo fan. So it was a plus point for me to see Luhan in the picture! Fighting author-nim! <3
aegyo-wink #6
Chapter 2: Exciting! It's really good so far!