Eyes wide open and mouths shut
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Title (4.5/5)
I am going to be extremely picky here and criticize on your lack of caps here. Other than that, perfect.
Foreward/Description (8/10)
I want to penalize you here because I have one question; "Why did you not include the prompt?!"
Other than that it gave me the creeps so well done.
Appearance (0/5)
No points here due to the lack of poster which is really sorry because the story is so great; a dark poster would have been ideal.
Plot (14/15)
The plot and storyline is truly amazing. The psychopath nature was brought about so well.
The gruesome scenes were also well-written in a rather poetic way I must say without causing stomachs to churn.
There was a snippet into the reason behind his mental state so all are well noted and credited.
I also like how you wrote it in his pov talking to a dead body. Intensifies the creepiness and enables emotions to come through.
Minus one for not making it obvious enough that it's Lay. Good choice of person due to quiet nature but hard to picture it as him because no clues were given; maybe some physical description in the opening would have helped even.
Originality (14/15)
Not sure if I can give you full credit here since it's based on a "prompt" but I say you tackled it well.
Grammer & Spelling (20/20)
Nothing to penalize here.
Flow (9/10)
Minus one for no spacing between each paragraphs making it hard to read.
Characterization (9/10)
As per above, not enough Lay in the story.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
Full marks. I was mind-blown really. I'm a huge fan of SAW so you can imagine me in candyland. *applause*
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
88.5/100!
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