The Chosen Twelve
Forbidden Dreamers Review GalleryTitle (2/5) → The Chosen Twelve is a pretty plain title. The minute I read the title, I knew it was an exo story without looking at anything else.
Foreword/ Description (3/10) → The description was very similar to the Exo music video "Mama," which I happen to know the story very well already so it wasn't very interesting or captured my attention in any way.
Appearance (1/5) → The poster is very messy and the title of the poster does not match your story title. The organization of the story is messy especially in the end. You can use a character chart to help you organize the character you want.
plot (10/15) → It was a good plot but I sort of knew what would have happened. It's one of those kinds of stories.
Originality (10/15)→ The story was easily predictable.
Grammar & Spelling (10/20)→ There were a lot of mistakes starting from your description. The first sentence: When The skies and grounds.... You should not capitalize "the." Were one legends is incorrect. The correct way is "once a legend." Through there twelve forces is incorrect. You should not use there in the sentence, you should replace it with "the." There were many mistakes however I can't correct them all for you.
Flow (7/10)→ I think the story moved too fast. You should slow down your pace of the story.
Characterization (8/10)→ The characterization was good, I wish you gave more visual details on how the character looks like.
Overall Enjoyment (4/10)→ I didn't find it very original. You had me through some point of the story then I got a little off tracked.
55/100!
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