When Jong Dae becomes Chen Review
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Title (4/5)
Fitting but a tad bit boring
Foreward/Description (8/10)
Simple and straight-forward
Appearance (5/5)
Poster suits the story perfectly. No penalization here.
Plot (10/15)
Rather hard to rate the story as it is not complete; I think the focus might be when he finds the strength and proves himself as Chen.
But I have a couple of feedback for the story so far:
- I believe your focus is on Chen's emotional development and there is quite a bit of angst involved; so it might be good to have a couple of chapters in Chen's POV
- Also in terms of emotional development; so far most of your story have been very descriptive, more insights on their feelings might help to make this story better
- The relationship development between characters can be made much more significant as well. Baek Hyun is obviously a very crucial character here and so far I've seen a few cute and gay moments but I think there relationship goes way deeper and you should focus on that
- Bonds between all the EXO members one by one should be made more impactful as well
Giving you a lower score here so there is much room for improvement and development for the following chapters ;-)
Originality (12/15)
Might be a bit on the plain side but definitely something fresh to the fanfic world; focus more on character development.
Grammer & Spelling (17/20)
Nothing major but you can improve on your phrasing, and overall standard of words.
Flow (8/10)
Chapter length and story development in each chapter is well spaced-out at a good pace.
Characterization (5/10)
The main guy here in Chen. More in-depth character development would be good.
Overall Enjoyment (8/10)
Not a bad read definitely; looking forward to the next chapters.
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
77/100!
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