Two Sides of the Same Boy
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Title (3/5)
I am going to start off by making this statement; I think your story is fantastic; it is deep and meaningful and interesting so in my opinion, the title does not give it justice. Having a title as such brings the attention towards Kai/Jongin instead; ie two version of this boy. However, I find that this story revolves around the main character Jin Hee more so I would have preferred a title based off her and her illness which creates these "two boys"
Foreward/Description (10/10)
I liked your description, you were able to highlight the main points of the story without giving everything away and hence providing it with a touch of mystery.
Your foreword on the otherhand was simply perfection; I will admit that I would judge someone attempting to write on such a heavy and difficult topic so knowing that you/your friend personal underwent such an experience, I was a lot more confident proceeding with the reading. So props to that.
Appearance (3/5)
Once again it felt like the story revolved around Jongin/Kai; it is just a feel I have.
Plot (13/15)
The only reason why I'm not giving you full marks is because this story is far from being completed and it is a bit hard to judge, there's still a long way to go for Jin Hee; will she ever recover? I guess that's the journey yet to be discovered.
Just a small feedback would be; I did like the change in timeframe within a single chapter but sometimes I felt that certains parts were a bit too "deep" for a seven year old but that could be a personal opinion. Other than that, factual wise I have nothing much to criticize and that coming from me is a big deal so congrats.
Originality (15/15)
I may be being a bit judgmental here but very matured writing for an EXO-based fanfic which is a rarity so good job there. I have to give you full marks because I find it essential you have full knowledge on a topic (in this case schizophrenia) because writing on it so I appreciate it.
Language (20/20)
Perfect. Been a long time since I read something of such good quality, I personally couldn't spot any mistakes.
Flow (8/10)
As mentioned above, slight confusion in jumps in terms of emotional state not the scenes itself ie a sixteen year old self talking and going into a seven year old talking or was it a sixteen year old self talking about her seven year old self? Hope you get what I mean.
Characterization (8/10)
Jin Hee's character is very well developed I must say. Haven't found any loopholes to be honest.
Giving you room for higher score in terms of Kai/Jongin's character development.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
90/100!
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