* I was at the work doing the usual things, Making smoothies and baking breads when I've felt this strange atmosphere. No, how should I put it? It wasn't that strange but it felt like an insufficient feeling. No one was inside; It was only me in here, The other two workers were probably ing around somewhere. The door opened and I saw him. Yes him, He had a milky white skin, slanty eyes and he gave off a mysterious aura. Somehow, I was drawn to him. I don't know why but I just was. He started to walk towards me. When I blinked, He was already in front of me.

As you can see, You doesn't capital the first letters of your paragraph. You make unnecessary dots that make it awkward and when you like to emphasize a word, You put quotation mark but it's not like everyone doesn't know the word though. You make word like Weird which is not even themed by some super-natural, deep-in angst or horror. You should find a perfect angle word because I read some tips or books about doing a story but you know you should just find another terms of an teen-age words like weird or stupid. Deep-in words helps to make your Readers a bit curious about it like this one: Weird change to Strange and Stupid change to Insane or other more.