by: ZororoHadad

Title — 3/5

Captivating and it gives some details regarding to the story.

Description/Foreword — 6/10

Originality/Creativity — 6/10

I haven't really heard this kind of story, But yeah. Sometimes there has the same plot but the storyline is not themed with the plot.

Plot — 7/10

The plot is very interesting. I like it.

Grammar/Spelling — 10/10

I can see a minimal mistake but I really like your grammar, I can exactly know the plot as I read the story more.

Writing Skill/Flow — 18/20

The flow of the story increased with your general grammar of the story and plot in pace as you got to the angsty parts.

Apperance — 18/20

Not to dark nor moody, The fonts, textures, pictures and colors are great.

Overall Enjoyment — 10/10

Of course there are some parts that need work. For me, almost always looking at stories in the reviewer/editor way will always spot those automatically. But rereading those and all of that aside, I think that the story is really on a good track especially where your damn deep english is. The idea of the story is really out there. Great job!

Extra/Comments — 5/5

Despite all of the critisms that I've said, I'm not going to leave you without a bonus of course. Thank you for your patience since I took so freakishly long with the review, but I hope these points can get you going with your story again. Thank you for choosing me afterall!

Overall  Total:  82/100