by: mikachannie

Title — 4/5

Well, The title is good but it was just long. I'm fine with " Deep For You " either. Yeah, It doesn't make up my attention. I find it as boring.

Description/Foreword — 7/10

Great, It was scripted and captivating. The " Update " thing just make my attention on it more low. Not doing stuffs on it but it just bother much.

Originality/Creativity — 8/10

By the concept and the plot, Yeah. I could say that I already saw this kind of story but this is more captivating. It just your plot is scripted and all.

Plot — 8/10

Plot is great. I'm not that good to give you a 10.

Grammar/Spelling — 9/10

Both your grammar and spelling are alright, I guess. I just need to tend it but it just really alright. It just you always write " be " words than others.

Writing Skill/Flow — 18/20

When I read some chapters, Good about it EXCEPT your grammars, I can see it.

Apperance — 11/20

Well, I know that you didn't provide a graphic in your form but when I see your story, I see that you have got one. Hmm..It is not like that, I can do graphics or something.

It just your font of the title..gazing on it is like being on a crack but it have chance that it was all moving. I don't see any appeal on the pictures, It just..I really felt on something.

Put some textures and brushes, It would be look more good on it.

Overall Enjoyment — 7/10

Yeah, I enjoyed your story. Don't be too much heart attacking by the parts. (I'm nearly to have it.) Watch your Grammar and Spelling because it gives your reader a

facepalm. got it?

Extra/Comments — 3/5

I just want to say that your poster doesn't gave me a captivating colors, You should just at least put slightly black. Your grammars are alright on fact but I just want to make

you to get careful about it since I've seen some stories like this with bad grammars. Plot is nice, Yeah..Thanks for choosing me even though I need my proper sleeps right now.

But I need to review more. Oh well, Your story is a DAEBAK! i'm not a ert in what i say in overall enjoyment ^___^V

Overall  Total:  74/100