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The Warmth

Title: 9/10

Good, but I'm not quite sure what exactly it had to do with your story. I kind of know, but it isn't presented clearly in your story.

Appearance: 7/10

No poster, just a pic. The backround was also just a normal picture. --That's okay, but it looks way better when there's a poster and backround from a graphic shop.

Description: 8/10

I like the description, but as I started reading the story, it seemed like the description didn't fit the story very well. Like I expected a different story from the one you wrote based on the description; but the description did loosely fit the story--it wasn't completely off. //Does that make sense? ... Comment/ask if it doesn't so I can explain more clearly.//

Foreword: 9/10

Okay, the foreword suits the story more than the description does. I Think the description and foreword should be flip-flopped, so that the description is the foreword and the foreword is the description because your foreword is more descriptive of the story and the description is worded more like a foreword. One more thing: I liked the foreword because it really says everything up front, EXCEPT I'm a little confused with "and conflict to make everything on the right place.." --grammar aside, I don't know where you're going with that or what it's supposed to mean.

Characterization: 8/10

So I think you set the characters up pretty much like they are in real life and you were telling their behind the scenes life. But, for someone like me who doesn't really know the people in the groups you're writing about, it can be confusing and the different people can easily be mixed up. I think you needed to set up their appearences with their names a little better. (Not a whole long chapter explaining eacch one, but say something like "_______, the sh