[CONTENTID1]Trouble Follows[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]By: Miechan[/CONTENTID2]

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› Title [ 9/10 ]

I couldn’t find any other words to say how this title suits your story so much eventhough it’s a bit common for a fanfic title. I only got the title after I read the story and I giggled so much after that xD. But, let’s just say, well done!

› Description and Foreword [ 9/10 ]

Your description was written lightheartedly, so I couldn’t help but to be excited about the story I was going to read. But when I read the foreword, I never expected it to be that way, I thought there’s something going to happen in the story and I don’t know what was going to happen (Yep, you could say I as a reader, got very excited) ≧◡≦

› Plot [ 13/15 ]

At the beginning, I wasn’t expecting anything as I read it but dang you caught me off guard! I had to keep myself from laughing so much. I loved how you slide in the obscurity feelings at the beginning, and made us readers went from “…bruh” to “OMG, what are they doing to that kid?!” “What is happening?!” and yes, again, you caught the readers’ attention again. I think the plot is good, and since it is one-shot, I see its potential to attract more readers! Good luck at that C:

› Character Development [ 8/10 ]

They have such a unique and fun personality, at some parts I couldn’t stop imagining about th