[CONTENTID1]He Heard It[/CONTENTID1]
[CONTENTID2] By: Queensabelle [/CONTENTID2]

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›Title [ 7/10 ]

The title is as obvious as the story, and kind of cute considering how the story came out. Well done!

› Description and Foreword [ 7/10 ]

Your description is so cute, and I liked how you put the little details about the story in it. But, I wished it would be more than about Min Jee's major problem because as I read through the story, I did not found the detail which went, "No matter how hard she tried, her voice just couldn't get any louder." I'm sorry, maybe I'm just confused at this, but it was only a one-time confession. Anyway, it's a right on! I liked it.

› Plot [ 9/15 ]

I loved the plot, however I think it was a bit rushed. Thus, it made the time setting in the story were blurry, honestly, I had to read the story for two times to get a better understanding of the situations in the story. Moreover, I think there should be more of plot features in the story to entice more readers considering the plot was a bit cliché and these additional little details may help you to bring out the strong effect on readers. Do you know what's make a good story? Feels. When your readers caught feelings on your story, that's when you know you did a great job and I have to say you are GOOD at delivering the emotions but we need more feelings coming out from both our lead characters, add a little spice more to patch the holes in your story. It would be interesting! Regarding Min Jee's crush on Jungkook, I think readers need more better absorption of it, I will leave the questions here, "How?" "Why?" "What?". WHY?, if I'm asking you these when I am supposed to have already know the answers, it means I'm asking you the invisible answers to all these, also helping you to think what's more to this story. In depth of a story is important to leave a mark on readers' heart. Anyway, you certainly did well ●ᴥ●

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