Alliance

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Alliance

By: s3zm31

Reviewer: Krytoria

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1. Title - 7/10 -

The title doesn't really match up with the story and I wouldn't be able to tell what the story is about just by looking at the title. It just very short and non-descriptive one word title. After reading the story, I was still wondering why is this story named Alliance.
 

2. Description/Forward - 7/10 -

the quote/ little part of the story is nice, but there was no description. The readers wouldn't be able to tell what the story is about. I would like if there was a little more of the story in the description or you make a longer description for the readers to see when they click on the story. That would caught their attention/interest more into reading the story.
 

3. Character Develpment/ Showca