Chapter 2

Criminal Love (DISCONTINUED)
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"EunHae watch out!!!"

 

I was back from my thought when I heard Key shouting my name. Fortunately I saw the piece of metal coming at my face. I grab it with my hand and kick the man hard in his stomach. I put his hands behind his back and handcuffs him. Finally Key arrived catching his breath. He then slap the man and put his hands on his hips.

 

"How dare you hurt my beautiful daughter"

 

I laugh sadly at his action because I was still thinking about these memories and Key seemed to notice. He patted my head lightly and smile sincerely. 

 

"Trust me. He'll never hurt you because he seemed to love you so much"

 

I just sigh and nodded. We went to the station with the man and I could notice that there was another person in the cell. I put the document on the table still looking at that person. Maybe a girl because of that tight little body who look a bit too muscular for a girl and has long hair. I couldn't see his face properly as he was looking down and sitting on the floor. 

 

"What did that girl do?"

 

"XD Officer EunHae that's not a girl actually but a boy. I got confused too"

 

Jonghyun say laughing since we're at work we need to be really formal. Well who wouldn't look confused but I really wonder what that boy did because he look so fragile and didn't look like he would ever hurt a fly and his hair look so soft I would love to touch it and patted his head. Seriously what the heck I am thinking. 

 

I finally got his document and read it but there wasn't his picture on it nor his name. It only says that he's 23 and.....Wait they didn't even specify Why he's here. Seriously I wouldn't be surprise if they had accidentally caught the wrong person because it wouldn't be a surprise if that happened again. 

 

Being the curious creature that I am. I decided to see his face. I approach the bars. But suddenly Jonghyun yelled my name and he look like he had seen a ghost. 

 

 

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snowtaems
#1
Chapter 6: This story plot had so much potential, despite some minor errors in terms of grammar.
It’s a pity you discontinued it TT
Kurosawa_Shizuka #2
Chapter 5: Ahhh please update this! I enjoy your writing a lot so I've decided to read all your stories! I really like this story :) Author-ssi, please update soon! ^-^
noomin #3
Chapter 5: Wht will tae say??
noomin #4
Chapter 4: Update soooon plzzz
TheKpopper_ #5
Chapter 1: 1.When you write, dont repeat ur words! Like 'again' "I had dream again of that terrible nightmare" stop here..no need to put again..again!
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2.you should accord ur verbs! Like you wrote 'flash' in this sentence it should be "Flashes".
3.The line where Eunhae asks Chanyeol what happened last night, shes like in a curious mood, right? Then you should put it like that: "C-c-chanyeol what happened....." shes is curious but hesitate to asks since shes drunk!
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4.Theres a part that dont makes sence...they were ON THE BED, when did chanyeol got the time to put her against the wall even if you said that the wall was close? You should have put something like: 'in a blink of an eye chanyeol put me against the wall' or something like that..ok.
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5.I think you missed a word in this sentence: "He my neck" and he started her neck, i think you missed a word cuz i didnt understand the He my neck thingy! xD
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6.Gotta praise you here. The line Key said: "Aaaa what the heck is that" seems like what Key would really say! Tehee! x)
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Overall the plot story is good! But you should revise your verbes a bit! xD theres some mistakes here and there! But well people wont mind them! ㅎ-ㅎ
Keep it up! :)