—REVIEW—
BAD LITTLE GIRLS
by Miro-chan  RATING:
★★★★★ (84/100) Hi, Miro-chan. First of all, I'm sorry I held your requests back too long because... I was a bit sick and had a hard time getting my throne in front of  the computer. This is a really quick review because your story was actually a drabble, which you stated as a oneshot so I was expecting something else. But nothing's wrong with that, let's go with this.

Foreword (78%) - I like everything, starting from the poster and it ends with the poster. Does that sound confusing? (laughs) Well, I just think that the poster and also the background has the story's feel to it so you should do it all the way down to the foreword... You know, adding colors, a little bit more detail and stuffs. Like victorian designs and subtle backgrounds with boxy layouts etc etc. 

Story Proper (85%) - Actually I'm not going to judge your story for its length. I respect that you have written a short story, and its okay with me. But then your story still have problems. You used three characters but when you actually see the story in light, Suzy seems and is logically the main character here. Adding the two girls in your poster and in the sight that is given by your title (ref. 'Girls'), it makes it look like they do have a major part in the story. But in reality, they don't. You should have made the story entitled, 'Bad Little Girl' as Suzy takes most of the spot in the proper. And also should have a poster with Suzy