—REVIEW—
FAINTLY PINK
by sungielove  RATING:
★★★★★  (Sorry, I had a problem and accidentally messed up with my introduction speech. Lol.)

Foreword (80%) - The poster first, since it is the one on the top.  I like the poster that is has this overwhelming pink all over Sehun and Luhan, though it wasn't used artistically. I also like the quote on the top, but the one below is quite confusing. Let me tell you this, a poster is like a book's cover. If it looks like it wasn't or it didn't went through critical thinking and concept planning, it probably won't work. Try requesting to a good graphic shop. Look through their portfolio/previous works first before requesting. I know it's from your sister, but... think of a little negotiating.

Story Proper (92%) - Pretty shocking. You're a talented writer since back then. I just remembered by now that I have worked for you before. Well, back to the review. I like how the start shoots off, it really sounded like you were still a new writer at that time, but as I said, a new writer that garners great talent at an early stage. Since you're good enough, I'll correct mistakes and make pin points elsewhere. (Bolded words/letters are the corrections)

"By then, Luhan's blank canvas was starting to fill with swirls of pastels.."

"To say that Luhan was stalking was somewhat wrong. He merely observed the boy, only much more intensely." I love this part.

By reading the part where Luhan gets his fl