—REVIEW—
DUST AND CRUMBLES
by hyunvirus

I'm shocked that you requested! Because I just did at your shop and it's really amazing you came here. Thank you, author-nim. I will now be doing your review. (scared)

Title (89%)- Crumbles made me laugh. This isn't according to your title wholely, I just thought this was kind of some dusty food crumbles. I'm so dumb. Well... It's good! Though I had to think well about what it is about... and it was kind of in between the state that it is practically pulling people to read because of curiousity, or pushing them away because it's hard to think that the element was too global and unexplainable. I'm really stupid that's why I can't picture it to something. Just dusty food crumbles. (laughs) *hits self*

Foreword (95%) - Short, sweet and clean. I just hoped that the quote was someone from the story, but I haven't read it all yet (not yet) so maybe this had something to do with what is inside. The poster is okay too, though the description below it was awkwardly placed. But, I have no problem with that. It's just that...

First Impression & Anticipation (93%)- It's rare for me to see stories with EXO-M as a group in it. Stories I mostly pass by have EXO-K. This is a good impression to me. And at first I thought Melanie and Leo were somehow Western-based characters (I'm unfamiliar of them, sorry), but as I saw your poster they weren't what I thought. I'm also 50/50 on the anticipation since I was unfamiliar of some of the characters but I tried not to be biased.

Story Proper (84%) - Gosh, no text selection again.

Well, I'm doing well with your story so I'd just be pointing out things, good or bad.

"And they eight of them..." = the

"her eyebrows almost meeting in the center" = I don't know if it's wrong or not but it would sound better if you use 'at'.

Melanie is innocent/pure, but she has a boyfriend. I don't know about