Fill My Heart By Your Love

Description

"If we compare their situation in Pyradmid shape,

he is the biggest manager who sits on the top,

and she is just the lowest staff.

And because of his perfectness makes people to interest him,

even her who always peeks and admires him."

 

"Some little happiness is serving him in the cafe shop,

which she works in part-time. And he doesn't even notice her,

until the event that makes a tiny fish hops from the basket

to protect a lion. His eyes start to save her pictures,

and it makes her feels strange as it's the eyes of hunter

and she's the food that is being glanced to catch and eat!"

 

 

Kim Jong In- A man who looks bad and fierce at the outside but in fact he is soft and caring.

Choi Hwe Kim (You)- A girl who is always has a bright smile on her face and always cares everyone.

Kang Anna (Your BFF)- A cool girl, awesome and confidence for herself.

Jessica Jung- A lady who is loving for her love tho it's dead, cold but smooth with her friends.

Oh Sehun- Kai's cousin, always asks him about his love life.

Choi Lu Han- A naughty elder brother of Hwekim who really loves basketball competition.

And others characters such as, Choi Sung Jae (Lee Sung Jae actually), Im Yoo Na, Grandpa Sun, Park Hae Mi, Kim So Ee, Kim Hyoyeon, Park Chanyeol, Lee Jun Hyuk, Byun Baekhyun and Kim Taeyeon.   

Foreword

Hello, guys! I'm new here to serve you some fictions. Actually, I'm not new at all because I used have an account here last year (2012-2013) and wrote 2 stories but after that I had an important exam on September 2013 and I had to focus hard to my studying because it was a national exam, like PSLE (?), if you couldn't do, nobody could help. And now, I passed my exam successfully and made me excited to have nothing could compare. There were so many students failed, I was lucky that I wasn't one in. And when I opened my account, it was too old because it's been inactive for a year, so that's why this new appears. From now, I can enjoy writing fanfics from my imaginations freely! (I'm still studying but it isn't a big problem now.) Guys, this isn't one of those old 2 stories I've written in my old account. This is completely new I started to write last week before creating this account. I will re-write those 2 old later, if you would like see.

Let me tell you something about this fanfic^^ honestly, Hwekim is my Korean name, but it doesn't mean the idol is me, it's you when you're reading, as I wrote in the description and characters, I just couldn't think of other name. And ages in the story are fake, okay? :) Tell me something, what do you think about it after readint the description? :D Some characters that didn't written in the description upper but appear the name in fanfic is just the name, mean it's just name to call. I'm going to update the 1st chapter after my breakfast tomorrow. Did I talk too much? Sorry >< And another thing to apologized is, sorry for my bad English ^^; I'm trying my best to improve it, you can help me? LOL I hope you will click Subcribe!

~Thanks for reading! Have a nice weekend!~   

 

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jeleexoxo #1
Chapter 4: Btw... update soon chingu! xD I'm anxious for the next! And I'D LOVE TO READ ALL YOUR STORIES!! XD
jeleexoxo #2
Chapter 4: It's stunning as per usual! xD Anyway... I suggest 'His life is like this' instead of 'His lives is like this' or maybe you meant 'He lives like this' xD Anywayy it's a fragmented sentence which I suggest revising xD other than that... AWESOME JOB!
jeleexoxo #3
Chapter 3: Lovely chapter!! xD I am so sorry it took me this long to realize that you've updated :( (side effect of drowning in the countless stories I've subscribed to) Anywayy... awesome as usual!! xD But I suggest changing 'Sure, I order it' into 'Sure, I'll get that' :)
LynSanity #4
Chapter 4: nope! haha i wrote my previous fics with present simple too :D ehehe but i write my fics in past tense now lol
and anyway, update soon pls! :D
amjtjahm33 #5
Chapter 4: I hope you update soon:) No pressure I know school and life is hectic.
amjtjahm33 #6
Chapter 2: Whaaa please upade soon:) I love the story btw^^
PipTheTerror #7
Chapter 2: I love that you put so much content into this story :)

I think with a bit of editing, the passion you've put into it will really come to the fore.
You put a lot of effort into creating three dimensional characters, which is always a great idea. No one likes reading a story that is totally black and white or too obvious. I think you've done a wonderful job trying to make sure that isn't the case :)

Perhaps, if you're really worried about your English (and I don't really think you should be), you could look into getting some kind of a beta reader. But, I think you're progressing incredibly well. The more you write, the easier tedious things like grammar will become :) and this story is definitely something to be proud of :) If I could make a tiny suggestion, maybe make the line spacing a little bit bigger? That might help thick readers like me follow a little bit smoother :) But that's not really a huge issue, just a tiny suggestion ;)

Just keep writing \o/ and do just as much reading :) One of the best ways to improve as a writer is to read as many words as you write \o/
Great job so far :D

- PiP.
-Moshiexo- #8
OMG ! I just read the foreword and I'm started to loving it . :D
*It's not easy to get this kind of story you know what I mean is like you , kai , luhan and also jessica . I hope Jessica won't be in this story .
jeleexoxo #9
Chapter 2: AMAZING!!!! AHHH WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO UPDTE AGAIN?!! Just needs a little bit of editing and its good to go xDD I love how you can write something this long! I always get side-tracked when it comest to writing xDD
TamTamlovesChanYeol #10
it sounds cool! :) hehe hwaiting ^-^ pls check out my stories too :3
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