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Lady in the Middle of the Night

 

Lady in the Middle of the Night- Review (GeekReader)
 
 
- Title: 4/5-
 
I thought it was a creative title but it doesn’t totally show what the story is about, but I thought it was nice and pretty original anyways(:
 
- Description/Foreword:
 
8/15- The description did explain what the story was about, but it wasn’t very persuasive, and there was no foreword.
 
- Character Development/Showcasing:
 
15/20- The personalities were properly introduced and the characters were all pretty static (meaning they stayed the same through the whole story)
 
- Appearance: 3/5-
 
I thought the poster didn’t really go with the story considering it’s a pretty dark story (pun not intended) and the poster had smiles and ‘pretty’ font. As for the story, the paragraphs had some problems for grammar and such, but it was easy to read.
 
- Originality:
 
10/20- Since you said that the story is a little bit like Taiyo no Uta, I’ll take your word for that and say it wasn’t 100% original, and there weren’t many cliff hangers to keep the reader on the edge and it was fairly predictable since you gave away some of it in the Author’s Notes XD
 
- Flow:
 
3/5- I thought the story was slightly rushed since there’s only 8 (9 if you count Letter) chapters, and even though you got every event in, I felt that the of the story was a little late and there was a few things that weren’t really important to the story line (like moments when you re-explain what happened in different point of views)
 
- Grammar/Spelling:
 
20/25- There was a few misspelled words and grammar issues regarding starting a new paragraph when a different person talks, and not putting in commas where they were needed.
 
- Extra:
 
3/5- I couldn’t really call the story ‘cute’ but I really love Teen Top fanfics and I thought you portrayed Chunji and L.Joe very well(:
 
Score:
 
66/100
 
Reviewed by one of SHINeeOppas Staff ^^
 
Kamsamnida kookoo
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NFTeenFinite #1
It is a very sad story...I'd cry a lot when I read it..Thank you for this story author nim....
ABoyWhoCriedWolf #2
Chapter 9: this is a very touching story :) Good jOb aUthOrNim ..:-)
ABoyWhoCriedWolf #3
new reader here :-) i like the plot ..and i'll look forward with it :-)
Earringloverz #4
Chapter 10: Wow couldn't stop myself from cryingTT-TT
shai209 #5
Chapter 8: First story reading that I actually cried!!! Amazing story! Upvoted! While reading I actually felt likr I was the oc! O.O. amazing story again!!!!!
minhoshawols #6
I love this!!!!
evilminic00kies #7
Chapter 10: Story was amazing. Omfg I couldnt stop crying. Format and sentences were a bit weird, but the overall plot was beautiful. Asdfghjkl cant contain all them feels.
xyper_crash21 #8
Chapter 8: 1. Foreword - 90/100
The foreword is well written, but there were some grammatically wrong sentences and the sad feeling of the description was kind of off-tracked because of “TT.TT”. One picture wasn’t working, I suggest you change it. And in “…is a sweet, shy and selfless girl”, what do you mean by selfless? Nevertheless, I got the plot of the story in the foreword. Good job! ^.^
2. Pictures - 98/100
As I said, one picture isn’t working(Maerin’s picture) and about the poster… It kind of didn’t match the story’s sad plot, it looked more of a happy one.
3. Story Plot - 99/100
Wah, the plot made me cry. Like really, cry. Everyone will cry at the ending. Your story also has a hidden advice on everyone, and the fact that Maerin never gives up on her oppa is heartwarming.

4. Grammar - 85/100
Your grammar was kind of off track. First, you keep changing the perspective from 1st person point of view to 3rd person point of view even though you clearly said “Eomma’s POV”, etc. Then, sometimes you have wrong spelling, not much, only a little. Then some missing words, so your score was a bit low.

5. Writing Style – 90/100
Your writing style was okay, though there were sentences cut and the next part of it was in another paragraph. I suggest you try and fix it ^^

6. Total markings – 92.4/100
Yay! Congratulations! Just work on your grammar and it will be perfect! Sorry if the review took so long, I decided I’ll do it ‘cause Iyah took so long ^^” No hard feelings! Thanks for choosing ~~~BUTTER REVIEW SHOP!~~~
Solution96 #9
Chapter 9: I cried really hard and i think about niel as her bf not brother lol! :)
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