Chapter 7: Umm, when Myungsoo and the oc met each other at the club, she introduced herself as Minji (a fake name). But when she texted him she signed/ended with her real name, Seo ___. Uhh, whut??
Chapter 3: Tbh, I'm having a very hard time reading the 3rd chapter... And from what I read, it's too obvious and too short for each chapter, for the fonts... Don't use too bright colour and also it's a little too small...
Hello~ Just gonna telling you something about the fic. Umm.. The girl is really hard to relate with, which is a bad thing especially since it's a you fic. Her being basically a Mary Sue in a different form doesn't make it any better... I think if she had some flaws to her it would've been a better read if we got to see her develop during the story.. Please don't be offended by this comment but this is just what I think ^^""
PS. Please don't change the font color to bright/very light colors. It makes the fic hard to read...
Chapter 23: I'm going to be honest here so I will seem harsh. Everything happens way too fast and alot of places don't make any sense. For example, it explained that the OC's father is sick in bed but how come he can go out of his room and fire the gun? If he had the energy why didn't he fight with them? And how did the fight end? Also, the OC doesn't have any flaw at all and this makes her whole character fake and un-interesting. Your storys problem wasn't explained and developed well enough. Work hard and don't be offended by my advice.
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